My lowest scoring hub needs critique.
Hey JBrock!
Even though I hate egg yolks, I took a look at your Hub
Please note that my recommendations are around improving general readability and not necessarily about making your Hub search-engine friendly (there are a lot of Hubs that can help in that department, though!):
1. I think you've got a lot of good information in the "Nutrients in the Egg Yolks and Egg Whites " paragraph. A comparative list might be more appropriate for this info.
2. I stumbled over a few sentences, like "The egg contains a lot of cholesterol because the right amount of cholesterol is good for humans, as well as if the egg was going to develop into an animal it would need that cholesterol." and "The Journal of Nutrition reported a study conducted by researchers at the University of Massachusetts, which found that when people ate three or more eggs per day, they did not have an increase in the low density lipoprotein (LDL) in their bloodstream."
It's a very informative Hub - good job!
I admire that you and other Hubbers post your work here for constructive criticism. It can be an incredibly vulnerable feeling, but I do believe it's one of the best ways to improve your craft.
Keep writing!!
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