I'd like feedback on my article: Teaching English On Line to Kids in China!

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   Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   I am not sure where I have gone wrong and would appreciate your feedback!
   
   Best wishes,
   
   Shelley
   Here is my article: Teaching English On Line to Kids in China!

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I took a brief look at your article and the first thing I noticed is that your title is incorrect.   You don't teach "on" kids...you teach "to" them.  Also, the article is not well organized.  Your info is all over the place.  You need a more specific title and more specific, focused details for the article itself.  Also, you never said how much money you're making doing this work, which is, I'm sure, a point readers would want to know.

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         Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Is it not correct to say  Teach English On Line?  I will go back and check but I thought it was mentioned that this pays $22.00 per hour.  Thanks for your feedback.  I will work on this!

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            TIMETRAVELER2posted 5 years agoin reply to this

            The title I saw said "Teaching English On Kids"...you must have changed it.  Also, $22 per hour means nothing.  I was talking about the average pay per week, month or year that would make doing this job financially worthwhile.

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               Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

               Teachers are allow to set their own ours and can work as much as they want keeping in mind they are on Beijing time.  I average $800 per month but some make as much as $4000.00 per month..  It is quite a difficult schedule to make  4k,  as you would have to do some overnight shifts on the weekends.  It is best as a part time job with the expectation of $600-$800 per month.   Most teachers do not use this as a primary income source.

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                  Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

                  "allowed"   sorry for the typo

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   CYong74posted 5 years ago

   Promotional writeup and links are not allowed on HP, Shelley.

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      Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I have removed the email addresses. This story is about my experience as a VIPKID teacher.  Is that considered a promotional write up?  Thanks!

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      Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      I think I have reconfigured the article to comply.  I hope this works!  Thanks for your feedback.

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   It's not a good idea, either, to approve comments with email addresses in them.

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      Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for that information!  I will be careful in the future!

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   Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years ago

   Thanks for the responses.  I think I have removed the "spammy" elements as I understand any email links would be considered spammy.  This story is just to tell about my experience as a retiree who has found a great part time job that give me such joy.....  Is this considered a promotional piece?  If I removed the name of the company would it be better? I could do that and the story would be basically the same.   Thanks again for your insight!

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   I see you've made some changes from the suggestions posted here. I am familiar with the program and you mention it quite a bit throughout your article. So, it appears spammy.

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      Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks!   I have looked this over and removed any mention of VIPKID and email links. I changed the title as was also  suggested.   This is also a learning process!  It has been a while since I submitted any articles  to HubPages and I didn't run into this "spammy" problem before.  The subjects of the other articles would not be seen as "spam".  Thank you again for your direction!

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   chasmacposted 5 years ago

   The problem with the title is that the article is not about online teaching to kids in China; it's about your experience with one particular school.
   
   You can write the article as an account of your experience, in which case you just need to change the title to mention the school by name or just "a school". (You need to name it in the text, of course.) Provided you're not promoting the school, it's no different to someone writing about their experience as a volunteer working for the Red Cross.
   
   Alternatively, you can write it as a review of that school as you have valuable real life experience of it. A non-promotional link to the school is fine as it's necessary for readers to go further and check out the school with a view to applying. A couple more negatives would make it more balanced and review-like, though.
   
   But you can't publish it as an article about teaching online to kids in China, as you'd then have to give some info on a few schools and talk about other things they offer or expect including contracts, payment reliability, etc.
   
   Many people are looking for online teaching to students in China right now as it has become big business in the last few years. The pay is better than from online teaching to students in most neighbouring countries like Vietnam - and often better than the $22 hourly rate you mentioned.

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      Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much for taking the time to give me this feedback.  It is most appreciated!  I have changed the title and removed mention of the name of the company.   You mention that other companies may be offering better compensation. I have  looked into a few and my experience has been that if they are paying more there is something that  I did not find appealing.....perhaps the classes were longer, or the schedule was more problematic.  I have adjusted to VIPKID and have become a "cheerleader"  because I really do enjoy what I am doing.  Best wishes,   Shelley

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         chasmacposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Shelley
         The info I gave about higher pay rates is second hand as I have friends who do exactly that job online for some Chinese schools. They often tell me about other schools that pay better than theirs, but yes there's always something problematic about them such as inconvenient schedules or frequent unpaid cancellations. All that type of info is what you'd have to research and constantly update if you chose to write according to your original title.
         
         But you've gone for the 'My Experience' type of article, which is a lot better, especially as it never needs updating. As for the title, it now matches the content, but "via the Internet" is not a search friendly phrase. Your original "online teaching..." phrase, coupled with "My Experience", is what you should use.
         
         As for the school, YES, you should mention it. The article looks a lot less trustworthy with no mention of the school's name.
         There's a fine line here. It mustn't be promotional, but you're providing valuable first-hand information to readers who are interested in doing what you're doing. Google and HubPages love that, so give your readers the name and a link so they don't leave empty handed and disappointed. Just don't make it promotional for the school.

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            Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you for this great advice!! Much appreciated!

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            Shelley H Cruzposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Thanks so much.  I have tried to follow your advice and hope that the article looks better now.  Best wishes,  Shelley

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   psycheskinnerposted 5 years ago

   If you are going to name the school, check your contract to make sure there are no non-disclosure clauses.

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