I'd like feedback on my article: EIGHT TIPS FOE BOOSTING INCOME THROUGH ONLINE

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: EIGHT TIPS FOE BOOSTING INCOME THROUGH ONLINE

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hey there, the introduction had a problem...here: 'making money' is repeated more than 3 times. Why not varied the phrase with similar synonyms? That would tell Google panda that you're not key stuffing the text.                                              Sorry, I don't read pass the introduction because of repetition and tone of monotony. But a device,  Language Tool, can you.                                           Go and download the free edition. It helps.                                            Notice the word 'FOE', in the title, obviously an error. It's 'For'. If all the body of the write is balanced, an editor would not snip it. Thanks.

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      OldRosesposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      You need to add a bio to tell the reader why you are qualified to write on this topic.

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         DrMark1961posted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Bio and summary. I do not see anyone ever finding this or his other articles so he will struggle to even reach the 1000 accolade.

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         shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Ok I will

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   FatFreddysCatposted 2 years ago

   There's a typo in your title ("FOE" instead of "FOR")
   
   Your title is also an sentence fragment. "Eight Tips For Boosting Income Through Online...." through online what, exactly?
   
   Also, TURN OFF YOUR DAMN CAPS LOCK IT LOOKS LIKE YOU ARE SHOUTING AT THE READER.

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      PaulGoodman67posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Yes, I agree, I was looking for a way to make my enemies bigger, so I was most disappointed to discover that the article isn't actually about "foe boosting".

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

   Ok sir thanks for info

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   Stephen Tomkinsonposted 2 years ago

   Download the free version of Grammarly. It will check your text for grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Add photos to your article from Unsplash.

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

   Ok sir

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   AliciaCposted 2 years ago

   Your use phrases like "tremendous amount of money" and  "rich remuneration" when referring to the rewards of online writing, and you say that we can earn a "handsome amount of money" from doing online surveys. You need to include authoritative references to support these ideas and examples of your own financial success from online writing and doing surveys.
   
   Your need to proofread the article. There are two spelling mistakes in the last subtitle, for example. A grammatically correct title and a photo with a suitable license would also be helpful in getting your article featured.

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

   Thanks so much for your info

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

   Thanks

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   shani Pashposted 2 years ago

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    psycheskinnerposted 2 years ago

    This is a topic many people right about. Unless you have a genuine innovation that earns huge money, it's impossible to break into.

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       shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

       Thanks

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       eugbugposted 2 years agoin reply to this

       That's write.

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          Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

          That's right or 'That's write'?                                 When did we began to think backward? Or are we being serious, or kidding? I've noticed it happen twice in this forun.

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             PaulGoodman67posted 2 years agoin reply to this

             Everything will turn out rite in the end!

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                Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

                Sure!

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    Sue Adamsposted 2 years ago

    The free version of Grammarly comes in handy for spellos and choosing correct prepositions etc. However, it won't correct contextual errors like:
    
    This is a topic many people right about.
    This is a topic many people write about.
    
    As for formating titles and textbox headings, Shani, use this free online app: Capitalize My Title

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       Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

       Tessa, thanks for pointing out the contextual qudstions.

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    Jodahposted 2 years ago

    You have change the “foe” to “for” in the title, so well done. You should also delete the word “through.” Eight Tips For Boosting Income Online…makes more sense.
    
    Also your last subheading:  “ERAN INCOME THORUGH ADVERTISEMENT” .. it should be “Earn” not “Eran” and “Through” not “Thorugh.”
    
    As others have said though, it would be better if only the first letter of the words in the titles were capitalised, not the whole word.

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       Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

       That makes much sense. Thanks.

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          shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

          Thx sir

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             Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

             You're always welcome.

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       shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

       Sure I will

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    Jodahposted 2 years ago

    shani Pash, you have made changes to your article and title, however, the title is still grammatically incorrect.  Is making online money is reality? It should be Is Maling Money Online a Reality?

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    Sue Adamsposted 2 years ago

    Hello Shani,
    
    I just looked at your new title:
    
    Is making online money is reality? (is = a verb used twice here)
    
    Is making online money a reality?
    
    1. Now copy your title
    2. Open this link: Capitalize My Title
    3. Paste it
    4. Copy it
    5. Paste it back into your article to replace
    
    Is making online money is reality?
    
    with
    
    Is Making Online Money a Reality?
    
    But for me, I would change it to:
    
    Is Making Money Online a Reality?
    
    6. Don't forget to bookmark the link  Capitalize My Title for future use.
    
    As I mentioned before. this tool can be used for both titles and headings.
    
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    PS
    While perusing your profile I notice an article title:
    
    Is Globel Warming real?  You MUST get the free
    Grammarly app.
    
    Then it would immediately highlight that this title should read:
    
    Is Global Warming real? with an "a", not globel, that ain't noble

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       Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

       'Is Making Money Online A Reality?' is a better title.                                                          Notice the small 'a' before 'Reality' is capitalized. Hubpages like it that better. But using the small letter is not wrong.                                             The use of 'is' twice is a negative. That's where the online editing device, Writing Tool, (WT) become signiifcant for a writer.                                                  I use grammarly likewise. But  I had the final say, not the AI witted robot.

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       shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

       Thanks I will

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    shani Pashposted 2 years ago

    Ok sir thanks

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    Miebakagh57posted 2 years ago

    Shani, most times, your response seems short, and apt to the point. Like: 'Sure I will', Thanks sir', without a grammatical punctuation...either comma, or fullstop (period).                                Why is that?                                        Punctuation plays a vital role in the tone of a sentence, or statement. The Oxford comma, is now an inportant punctuation mark with hubpages, and Hubpages required you made a knowledgeable use of it. Much thanks.

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       Stephen Tomkinsonposted 2 years agoin reply to this

       Talking of Oxford commas, I came across an example today in which one would have been useful. The sentence read something like:
       "He spent his time reading books about great men and magazines."
       So, are there books about great men and others about great magazines?
       The sentence is much clear with an Oxford:
       "-- reading books about great men, and magazines

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          shani Pashposted 2 years agoin reply to this

          Thanks sir

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          Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

          Stephen, you rightly punctuated the last part of the sentence with the Oxford comma.                              The statement now reads clearer, and makes much sense.                                          Many writers, and even students are not aware of it's use, because they're not taught that in their English class. I was a victim of the issue up to my university days. But leveraging the hubpages forums, and the learning centre, and going online, I've learnt to resolve it.                                         I also learnt that it was made a legal challenge in a High Court. The Oxford University Press, won the case then adopt it as a private brand. Thanks.

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