I'd like feedback on my article: Gun Violence Awareness

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   Evan Lowengrubposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Gun Violence Awareness

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Here are my suggestions.
   
   The article is too short. You should aim for at least 700 words. 1000 words is a better length. You should avoid the overuse of the term "gun violence" in the article.
   
   You need to add authoritative references for all of the statistics and some of the facts that you mention.
   
   You need to proofread the article to check for grammar and factual errors. The United States is not classified as a "low income" country, for example.
   
   Much of your information about how schools are responding to gun violence is widely known. You need to think of new information to add or add more details about the facts that you've already included.
   
   You should include the source of the photo, which should have a suitable license.

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   Will Apseposted 4 years ago

   It is live on hubpages now. The wonderful thing is how many people have already responded with fulsome praise in the comments section:
   
   Johnny Stills
   
   4 days ago
   
   Love It
   
   
   Phil Swift
   
   4 days ago
   
   
   Facts, gun violence is a serious thing
   
   
   Bob Frie
   
   4 days ago
   
   amazing article
   
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   Those comments seem to have come before the article had passed QAP. One person was kind enough to include the keywords in their remark.

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      And each of of those 'people' joined on the same day as you and only left a single comment on your article.
      
      If you think you can game the system, know that HubPages doesn't work like that. You don't get extra rankings or earnings via comments and followers.

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   CYong74posted 4 years ago

   At the very least, leave 23 comments. Every one knows that's the standard for split personalities nowadays.

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      Ladymermaidposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Lol... I learn something new everyday

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   Will Apseposted 4 years ago

   Those names are so unconvincing. These are the ones I would have chosen:
   
   Chelsea Fauxlove
   
   Arnold Legup
   
   Pinky Poleclimber
   
   Morely Rankin
   
   A definite air of verisimilitude in that ensemble. The algos would swoon.

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      greenmindposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Pinky Poleclimber? Awesome.

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         Will Apseposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         She's a gogetter. But Morely is cooler.

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