bang on your ears like screwdrivers

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   jsgree5@emory.eduposted 14 years ago

   My style is dazzling
   Drink it up like gasoline
   A thousand words for every gallon,
   You'd think I'm part of Stalin's team
   Freshly-loaded magazine
   For every criticism cast at me
   Like a line thrown to a river to disrupt the river's placid scene
   You're stirring ripples without warrant
   I don't want your turbulence or torrent
   And you claim it's only honesty but your honesty's abhorrent
   So I try to ignore it,
   Send back the hook before it finds the soil and then claws for it,
   Roots in deep,
   Anchors in the mud like those thoughts that can creep
   into your head just before you fall asleep,
   Thoughts of daytime thoughts of high school thoughts of futures where my voice will rule
   And I hold goblets with gems and gobble what you condemn because
   I love the way my chewing annoys you
   When the room is silent and sound won't end
   And I'll make you stare at the muscles on my face
   Move out and roll in at an oil derrick's pace
   You think I'm chewing a meal but your cringing's the appeal,
   Providing more nutrition than my mother's early meals
   Cooked with protein and vegetables and a parent's concerned zeal,
   So I eat with my mouth open until you use your hands like a seal
   over your eyes to neglect the stimuli that bang on your ears like screwdrivers
   or pirates
   Whose laugh resound in the heavens and make the sky laugh ugly teal.

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      sophsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Love it!

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      lorlie6posted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Awesome...you've got some incredible talent.  Hubs are the best way to showcase what you've got.
      AND I'd say you need to get a divorce!

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   Daniel Carterposted 14 years ago

   Brilliant.
   
   Make this a hub.
   
   And then tell us what you're thinking by responding in the forums. People will get to know you there and you'll develop a fan base.

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      jsgree5@emory.eduposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Haha, thanks! I just found this site earlier today. Is it typical to make a new hub for each entry? That seems so diffuse and unwieldy!

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         Faybe Bayposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Sorry I missed this post. Yes you treat it as if it's a newspaper and you are a columnist without a deadline, who also chooses your own assignments. It works and some people make a lot of money at it.

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         Justine76posted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Its typical to make hubs. Thats the whole point. The forums are more for chatting, asking questions, etc. Forums get lost in the shuffle, hubs stay put. Hubs make you money. Forums do not.

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            Faybe Bayposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            Hi Hunnie!

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               Justine76posted 14 years agoin reply to this

               Only here for a minute, I hope your well!!

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                  Faybe Bayposted 14 years agoin reply to this

                  Yeah but I need a nap and then homework. School tomorrow.
                  Have a sweet day, happy and sunny and bright! I hope you are well too. Write me anytime!

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                     Justine76posted 14 years agoin reply to this

                     soon as I get a second! have a good sleep and good luck with school.

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      Justine76posted 14 years agoin reply to this

      yes, I agree.

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   AEvansposted 14 years ago

   I believe this should be categorized as Poetry not creative writing, however I agree make it a hub and get credit for it. You will get more readers once you create it.

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   G-Ma Johnsonposted 14 years ago

   sorry to interupt...but how do I report a possible scammer?

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      sophsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Click the report button

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         G-Ma Johnsonposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks...where is it? I rec'd a personal e-mail and I want to forward it to the Hubpages....) Hugs G-Ma Johnson

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            sophsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            Ohhhh it's an email? I'm not sure how you do that there must be some way you can though sorry I can't be much help

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   flread45posted 14 years ago

   Hubletize this thing,before someone steals it!!

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   SwiftlyCleanposted 14 years ago

   Really nice!

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