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My First Haiku
This might not follow all of the strict rules of traditional Haiku, but I am anything but traditional. There is plenty of time for technicalities later. Today is about fun....
My First Haiku....
They do it so well
Now I am dying to try
Newbie's first Haiku
How to Write Haiku, and a few more to enjoy
- By a fellow huber, Daisy Mariposa; How to Write a Haiku about Nature
Learn the differences between Japanese haiku and English language haiku. Learn what a modern haiga is. Learn how to add a cut (kiru) and a season word (kigo) to your 17-syllable poem. - You Make Me Feel... - Haiku
Exressions of love told through the seasons and haiku poetry - Booties to Boots - Haiku
A journey from baby boy to man through shoes and seasons.
- The Seasons In Socks - Haiku
A journey from Spring to Winter, little girl to woman, told in socks. - Summer Daybreak - Haiku in Traditional Style
While modern Haiku poetry focuses mainly on the 5-7-5 structure of the poem, there are other rules that apply when writing a traditional Haiku. I find writing a modern Haiku tons of fun. Everyone should try it. However, there is something strikingly.
Comments
I really must say
Your first effort's outstanding
And puts mine to shame.
Congrats
Bob
From someone who has no clue about Haiku, that is a great piece :)
This is wicked cute. I love the picture, it seems to fit the poem perfectly.
You are braver than I am; I won't even try. Well done newbie! :)
Hello Dana-
Nice verse. I found that the 5-7-5 structure of traditional haiku to be very useful in helping me to choose my words very carefully. With so few, It is the opportunity to expand my vocabulary and ways to form thoughts.
There are famous haiku writers who advise that in haiku (particularly when written in English) the 5-7-5 is merely the carcass of the poem and that we should all reach for the imagery and essence.
So, I figure that as an amateur, I find the structure a wonderful starting point, and as I grow I will branch out.
Good luck.
-DW
PS: when I said "from someone who has no clue about Haiku..." I meant ME, not you! lol, lol.... Sorry!
Excellent, DanaTeresa, I love it! Jamie
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Wow! Thank you guys for the great comments. I guess its gonna be all downhill from here! :)
Bob - Thanks. and Nicely Done!
LaThing - Ha! No apology needed. I had only a small clue before I did a little refresher course, after which I promptly through the rules out the window in the name of fun.
Phoebe - I agree 100% with your assesment. Thanks for "getting it". I don't know what it is about that doggy. He just felt right.
Bill - Brave? No. Batty. A little. Something about hubpages makes me feel like every now and then throwing caution to the wind. Weeeee! Try the Haiku. I dare you! :)
DW - My thoughts exactly. I started by just trying to say something in 5-7-5. Then I fussed around with words until I got some sort of emotion. I giggled. And that was enough for a first try. Next I will work on the traditional rules: nature theme, emotion, surprise, etc. A great haiku is like a burst of emotion. I am sure I will be venturing into new realms of words and thoughts and feelings as well. What a journey it will be.
Jamie - I always enjoy your poetry. I am so glad you got to enjoy some of mine!
THANKS AGAIN EVERYONE. I had a lot of fun writng this and you all have added to that tremendously.
Nice job on your first Haiku-Isn't it fun? I think the fact that their short makes the words more powerful.
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Minnetonka Twin - They are a lot of fun. I published that right before going to work and it brightened my whole day. And yes. The restriction on words does add power. Only the strongest words get chosen. Thanks for the comliment.
Loved this Dana!
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AudreyHowitt - Thank you!
It was fun to write. For the second batch (tiro of Spring) I tried to stay more true to the traditional spirit and rules of Haiku because I find them beautiful and wanted to repsect that. This first one was all about fun! Glad you enjoyed it!
Yay! Good job. It really is fun to write a haiku, to try to cram everything in the limited syllables. Great job!
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Victoria - Yes. It is fun to write them. Even when "following the rules". The next thing I have to master is to "hide the 5-7-5" so that it flows smoothly. I think I almost got it.
Thanks for your comment, may I add mine? Perfect 5-7-5 and perfect stating of what you were feeling at the time. Well done, just as your fellow Hubbers have attested.
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Thank you! and thank you for your kind words in response to my comment on your Iris Haiku...
I really had so much fun writing this. For my subsequent ones I have decided to follow more of the traditional Japanese guidelines. I might go rogue again with a few more :)
An excellent first Haiku!! I love it!! (and the drawing too!) :)
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Beth100 - happy you liked it. Thank you also for the follow and the fan mail. See you around the hubs!
Dana could haiku
Her first one is excellent
Sunshine says "Bring It"
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Sinshine - Love the Haiku response! These things are way too much fun. Like M&Ms - yummy tiny nuggets of candy coating and a chocolate surpise on the inside. (i have no idea where that came from. Must be sunstroke from all that wonderful Sunshine!)
I think we got the best portion of your workday!
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Perspycacious - it is always such an honor to get an encouraging comment from a fellow poet (if you would be so kind as to consider me one). thank you.
Cuteness! Way to go on your first Haiku! Well done!
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Crisp - nice to meet you. Thanks for the great comment. I wanted to get my feet wet and have some fun. I am thrilled that other people are enjoying it too!
Dana,
I love your first haiku!
I've always enjoyed how you write haiku about non-traditional or unusual subjects.
Thanks for adding a link to my article "How to Write a Haiku about Nature." I appreciate it.
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Thanks DAISY! ... I was mulling over writing haiku when I saw other hubbers dong it. I figured I better just throw one out there to get my feet wet and have some fun... Then I studied up on the "rules" you so nicely present in your How To hub.... I am glad you appreciate my odd subject matter. When I wirte, it is important to me that it be something uncommon so that I feel like I am contributing something new to the world.
Thank you so much for your continued support and encouragement.... HUGS!
I admire you and all the other Hubbers who write Haiku. I won't even try!
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mary615 - thank you for the recognition. i also admire those that do it well. You really should try. Just write one for yourself. It is liberating when you finally get it right.... take care :)
I enjoyed reading your haiku. :-)
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ignugent17 - Thank You! I love writing them! :)
Very nice, Dana, I enjoy seeing the new ones you keep posting on facebook, and the colorful awesome pics to go along- wow, when you're done, make a book!
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blondey - Thanks hunny!... I am totally hooked on writing short poetry... After a few hundred more, I am sure I could scrape together a book, or two, or ten..... luv ya! :)
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