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bang on your ears like screwdrivers

  1. jsgree5@emory.edu profile image57
    jsgree5@emory.eduposted 7 years ago

    My style is dazzling
    Drink it up like gasoline
    A thousand words for every gallon,
    You'd think I'm part of Stalin's team
    Freshly-loaded magazine
    For every criticism cast at me
    Like a line thrown to a river to disrupt the river's placid scene
    You're stirring ripples without warrant
    I don't want your turbulence or torrent
    And you claim it's only honesty but your honesty's abhorrent
    So I try to ignore it,
    Send back the hook before it finds the soil and then claws for it,
    Roots in deep,
    Anchors in the mud like those thoughts that can creep
    into your head just before you fall asleep,
    Thoughts of daytime thoughts of high school thoughts of futures where my voice will rule
    And I hold goblets with gems and gobble what you condemn because
    I love the way my chewing annoys you
    When the room is silent and sound won't end
    And I'll make you stare at the muscles on my face
    Move out and roll in at an oil derrick's pace
    You think I'm chewing a meal but your cringing's the appeal,
    Providing more nutrition than my mother's early meals
    Cooked with protein and vegetables and a parent's concerned zeal,
    So I eat with my mouth open until you use your hands like a seal
    over your eyes to neglect the stimuli that bang on your ears like screwdrivers
    or pirates
    Whose laugh resound in the heavens and make the sky laugh ugly teal.

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      sophsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Love it! smile

    2. lorlie6 profile image88
      lorlie6posted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Awesome...you've got some incredible talent.  Hubs are the best way to showcase what you've got.
      AND I'd say you need to get a divorce! lol

  2. Daniel Carter profile image86
    Daniel Carterposted 7 years ago

    Brilliant.

    Make this a hub.

    And then tell us what you're thinking by responding in the forums. People will get to know you there and you'll develop a fan base.

    1. jsgree5@emory.edu profile image57
      jsgree5@emory.eduposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Haha, thanks! I just found this site earlier today. Is it typical to make a new hub for each entry? That seems so diffuse and unwieldy!

      1. Faybe Bay profile image84
        Faybe Bayposted 7 years agoin reply to this

        Sorry I missed this post. Yes you treat it as if it's a newspaper and you are a columnist without a deadline, who also chooses your own assignments. It works and some people make a lot of money at it.

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        Justine76posted 7 years agoin reply to this

        Its typical to make hubs. Thats the whole point. The forums are more for chatting, asking questions, etc. Forums get lost in the shuffle, hubs stay put. Hubs make you money. Forums do not.

        1. Faybe Bay profile image84
          Faybe Bayposted 7 years agoin reply to this

          Hi Hunnie!

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            Justine76posted 7 years agoin reply to this

            smile Only here for a minute, I hope your well!!

            1. Faybe Bay profile image84
              Faybe Bayposted 7 years agoin reply to this

              Yeah but I need a nap and then homework. School tomorrow.
              Have a sweet day, happy and sunny and bright! I hope you are well too. Write me anytime!

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                Justine76posted 7 years agoin reply to this

                soon as I get a second! have a good sleep and good luck with school.

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      Justine76posted 7 years agoin reply to this

      yes, I agree.

  3. AEvans profile image69
    AEvansposted 7 years ago

    I believe this should be categorized as Poetry not creative writing, however I agree make it a hub and get credit for it. You will get more readers once you create it. smile

  4. G-Ma Johnson profile image57
    G-Ma Johnsonposted 7 years ago

    sorry to interupt...but how do I report a possible scammer?

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      sophsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Click the report button smile

      1. G-Ma Johnson profile image57
        G-Ma Johnsonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

        Thanks...where is it? I rec'd a personal e-mail and I want to forward it to the Hubpages....yikes) Hugs G-Ma Johnson

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          sophsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

          Ohhhh it's an email? I'm not sure how you do that sad there must be some way you can though sorry I can't be much help sad

  5. flread45 profile image80
    flread45posted 7 years ago

    Hubletize this thing,before someone steals it!!

  6. SwiftlyClean profile image35
    SwiftlyCleanposted 7 years ago

    Really nice!

 
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