Any constructive criticism & advice welcome with Newest Hub

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   tsmogposted 8 years ago

   Marketing Internet Articles as Products: A Beginner Guide
   
   Firstly I have an open heart and listening mind while Thank You for any feedback.
   
   Influences are I view all in the forums as a friend in nature, teachers, and mentors leading me as I seek better success.
   
   A known is it passed the QAP Featured with a score of 70 yesterday dropping to 67 overnight. Usually an entry score is the low 60’s. I am happy with the gain :-), yet open to any constructive criticism and advice.
   
   Next, TMI . . .
   
   It is as a beginner beginning anew with recent passions – HubPages and learning writing for the internet while not posted a Hub for six months.
   
   Written knowing it is a saturated marketplace. So, a first question is I used as a guide for the topic the first suggested by the HP. Next, I pondered if should change to HP Tutorial & Community.
   
   HubPages»Personal Finance»Income & Making Money»Making Money on the Internet
   
   The Hub is a Beginner guide from learning here in the forums and elsewhere.
   
   Structure is content first followed by guides after the summary
   
   An outcome is Actual content – 2,031 (69%) though the summary without the following guides. Other = Sub-Headings, Captions & etc. – 920 (31%) So, a ratio of 2:1. Word count at HP – 2,951 Edit Mode.
   
   Known Faults:
   
   Over explaining. Excuse: With career as analyst report structure for leadership team was opening cover (Not enough word count for a Hub). Then thorough details maybe too much word count for a Hub?
   
   Grammar & Mechanics. Excuse: A ‘C’ student in English. (Ooops!) Better at building and tuning performance cars.

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      kbdressmanposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I actually found your hub earlier and had it open for future reading.  I'm having a hard time following you to be honest.  If I re-read each sentence and analyze them, I can get it, but it's mentally exhausting and has kept me from making it past your first paragraph.  I'd suggest taking it one sentence at a time.  Identify the purpose of that sentence and then ask yourself if the wording is the clearest way to achieve that or not. 
      
      For example:  Your first sentence:  "An article is a product primarily the content with its context - images, videos, and tables / graphs for two marketplaces within the market."  I'd break it into three sentences.  The first would communicate that an article is a product, the second would explain how the article is a product and the third would explain the two marketplaces within the market part.

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         tsmogposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         I am leaning with your suggestion. I think using that approach I may use as suggest shorter sentences. I like the idea with a short explanation what a product is. While may with the third create interest and focus to read further to learn about those?

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            kbdressmanposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I think you're getting it.  Once you finish that, you might have a native English speaker proofread it for you.

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               tsmogposted 8 years agoin reply to this

               I appreciate your suggestion for editing. That was hinted that I was a 'C' English student at the TMI section. I will take to heart with an open mind while I am a native to the US said with Maybe it is best I do find someone to proofread first. Thanks!

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      kbdressmanposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      The second thing I would do is make sure that each idea flows into the next.  Are all your sentences in the best order?  Are all your paragraphs in the best order?  Do you define any terms before you use them?  Does each sentence flow into the next?

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         jaanu01posted 8 years agoin reply to this

         "An article is a product primarily the content with its context"
         
         It seems to me that this is ia a google translated article

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            tsmogposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I don't understand your meaning? Maybe more will help me with translated?

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   paradigmsearchposted 8 years ago

   Account hacked. Disregard.

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      tsmogposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thank You paradigmsearch! Link fixed

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   DrMark1961posted 8 years ago

   Tim, I do not think that I am dense, but I did have a hard time following this. Perhaps your syntax is not suited to this subject? (This would be somewhat akin to reading a textbook on capitalization written by e.e. cummings--with no capitalization used in the whole book.)
   If you are going to try and revise this, I would recommend you follow some of kbdressman´s suggestions below.

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      tsmogposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much Dr. Mark! I think I will take a few days break and clear my head. Then copy/paste onto Word and focus on Paragraph structure beginning with topic sentences. BTW do you write from an outline or suggest that? I never do, but think I will outline the pasted article to gain article flow too. Maybe should have begun that way as a beginner learning again. I will look at e.e. Cummings too. You've raised curiosity :-)

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