Newbie Needs Feedback

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   AlidaRosaposted 13 years ago

   I want constructive criticism about my hub and my writing. A real opinion on how I can improve. I'm a newbie on hubpages. I want some feedback. Thanks
   Alida

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      Polly Cposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Alida, welcome to Hubpages, I hope you enjoy your time here. I took a look at your first hub, and I have to say that it is just way too short. I realise that it is just an outline for future hubs that you are going to do over the year as you master the art of cuban cooking, but in any case it needs expanding on.
      
      I assume you are going to do this whole series and then link them together. If this was my plan, for my first hub I would probably write a detailed article about what Cuban cooking actually is....perhaps some history..styles of food...Personally I don't know anything about it yet, but I'm sure you could come up with ideas. You could also add photos of Cuban dishes etc, perhaps a picture of Cuba, or Cuban people..
      Do it all in several text capsules so that you can add the photos down the right hand side.  Good luck

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         Polly Cposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Oh I didn't see the other paragraphs...

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      psycheskinnerposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      I would suggest putting the comment box at the end of the hub.  I made the same mistake as Polly on first glance and thought there was only one paragraph on the hub.  Otherwise, it looks good

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   Website Examinerposted 13 years ago

   Welcome. I read your hub and have these comments:
   
   - The comments capsule needs to be at the bottom of your hub, after all of your text, or some people will not read to the end;
   
   - You tend to repeat the same words over and over - try to streamline your text and vary it (e.g. Miami / this city / the metropolis)
   
   - You write well otherwise, mixing personal thoughts and experiences with the matter at hand;
   
   - You should use at least one image, possibly also a video from YouTube.
   
   Good luck.

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   Rochelle Frankposted 13 years ago

   Since you only have a brief paragraph, so far, I would suggest adding at least five or six hundred more words, with a few photos if possible, before calling it a hub.
   
   (I love Cuban food-- looking forward to seeing the expanded version. )
   
   Take a look at some other hubs (maybe on cooking subjects)to get an idea of what a hub can be.
   
   Welcome to HubPages.

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      Website Examinerposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      There are more paragraphs, Rochelle, that's the problem - they are hidden underneath the comments capsule.

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         Rochelle Frankposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         OK-- I see now. This happens to a lot of new hubbers, because they don't know they can reorder the hub capsules either by using the up and down arrows or the reordering feature on the right side.
         
         It is still a little short, but I'm sure the suggested reading -- and even just exploring the edit features-- might help.

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   wildernessposted 13 years ago

   I agree with website examiner.  I very nearly left the hub on finding the comments capsule; the rest of the hub wasn't visible and I was left wondering "what kind of hub is this?"
   
   As examiner points out, a picture or two, particularly of that dish, would be helpful and increase interest.  Snap a pic of dinner each night perhaps.
   
   I didn't care for the first part - too many short, choppy sentences for my taste.

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   Polly Cposted 13 years ago

   Alida, do you know how to reorder the capsules, on the right hand side? I still think it could do with some pictures, too.

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   Just by looking at hub one and only hub, I've come to the conclusion that you need to read some hubs about HubPages and other things.
   
   So, my best advice right this second, is in the links below:
   
   Frogdropping and Darkside, both excellent hubbers and writers. Their links are respectively setup below.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Hubpages-Help
   http://hubpages.com/hub/hubpages-blueprint
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/how
   http://hubpages.com/hub/capsules
   http://hubpages.com/hub/howhubworks
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Hubscore
   http://hubpages.com/hub/hubpages-works
   
   You can read anything by Sunforged on SEO techniques and Relache has a hub on earnings, if that's what you are here for.
   
   Other than that. I do hope you enjoy your time here.

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      AlidaRosaposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank You for all the feedback. I have started learning . So I moved the comments to the bottom of the page. Thanks again for all your feedback.

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         Cagsilposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         You're welcome.

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   Michael E. Hortonposted 13 years ago

   Your hubpage looks great.

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   Pcunixposted 13 years ago

   I'd like to see some additional commentary on what can go wrong and how  to avoid it.
   
   Failures can be much more interesting than successes.

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   Website Examinerposted 13 years ago

   Post some links to your own hubs, let's see what we'll find.

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      Pcunixposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      I'm sorry, did you think I was being critical?
      
      I was following up on the suggestions that the hub could be a bit longer.  Adding information on what can go wrong could be one way to do that.
      
      I probably  should have been more clear about that.

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         Website Examinerposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         I think it was the word "failures" that caused me to respond. I like your new version better. Trying to be a bit protective of the new hubber, that's all.

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            Pcunixposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            I meant cooking failures :-)
            
            But I see your point and will try to be more careful in the future.

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               Website Examinerposted 13 years agoin reply to this

               Goodness! That is funny!

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