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Newbie Needs Feedback

  1. AlidaRosa profile image61
    AlidaRosaposted 6 years ago

    I want constructive criticism about my hub and my writing. A real opinion on how I can improve. I'm a newbie on hubpages. I want some feedback. Thanks
    Alida

    1. Polly C profile image88
      Polly Cposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Hi Alida, welcome to Hubpages, I hope you enjoy your time here. I took a look at your first hub, and I have to say that it is just way too short. I realise that it is just an outline for future hubs that you are going to do over the year as you master the art of cuban cooking, but in any case it needs expanding on.

      I assume you are going to do this whole series and then link them together. If this was my plan, for my first hub I would probably write a detailed article about what Cuban cooking actually is....perhaps some history..styles of food...Personally I don't know anything about it yet, but I'm sure you could come up with ideas. You could also add photos of Cuban dishes etc, perhaps a picture of Cuba, or Cuban people..
      Do it all in several text capsules so that you can add the photos down the right hand side.  Good luck smile

      1. Polly C profile image88
        Polly Cposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        Oh I didn't see the other paragraphs...

    2. psycheskinner profile image82
      psycheskinnerposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      I would suggest putting the comment box at the end of the hub.  I made the same mistake as Polly on first glance and thought there was only one paragraph on the hub.  Otherwise, it looks good smile

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    Website Examinerposted 6 years ago

    Welcome. I read your hub and have these comments:

    - The comments capsule needs to be at the bottom of your hub, after all of your text, or some people will not read to the end;

    - You tend to repeat the same words over and over - try to streamline your text and vary it (e.g. Miami / this city / the metropolis)

    - You write well otherwise, mixing personal thoughts and experiences with the matter at hand;

    - You should use at least one image, possibly also a video from YouTube.

    Good luck.

  3. Rochelle Frank profile image88
    Rochelle Frankposted 6 years ago

    Since you only have a brief paragraph, so far, I would suggest adding at least five or six hundred more words, with a few photos if possible, before calling it a hub.

    (I love Cuban food-- looking forward to seeing the expanded version. )

    Take a look at some other hubs (maybe on cooking subjects)to get an idea of what a hub can be.

    Welcome to HubPages.

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      Website Examinerposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      There are more paragraphs, Rochelle, that's the problem - they are hidden underneath the comments capsule.

      1. Rochelle Frank profile image88
        Rochelle Frankposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        OK-- I see now. This happens to a lot of new hubbers, because they don't know they can reorder the hub capsules either by using the up and down arrows or the reordering feature on the right side.

        It is still a little short, but I'm sure the suggested reading -- and even just exploring the edit features-- might help.

  4. wilderness profile image96
    wildernessposted 6 years ago

    I agree with website examiner.  I very nearly left the hub on finding the comments capsule; the rest of the hub wasn't visible and I was left wondering "what kind of hub is this?"

    As examiner points out, a picture or two, particularly of that dish, would be helpful and increase interest.  Snap a pic of dinner each night perhaps.

    I didn't care for the first part - too many short, choppy sentences for my taste.

  5. Polly C profile image88
    Polly Cposted 6 years ago

    Alida, do you know how to reorder the capsules, on the right hand side? I still think it could do with some pictures, too.

  6. Cagsil profile image60
    Cagsilposted 6 years ago

    Just by looking at hub one and only hub, I've come to the conclusion that you need to read some hubs about HubPages and other things.

    So, my best advice right this second, is in the links below:

    Frogdropping and Darkside, both excellent hubbers and writers. Their links are respectively setup below.

    http://hubpages.com/hub/Hubpages-Help
    http://hubpages.com/hub/hubpages-blueprint

    http://hubpages.com/hub/how
    http://hubpages.com/hub/capsules
    http://hubpages.com/hub/howhubworks
    http://hubpages.com/hub/Hubscore
    http://hubpages.com/hub/hubpages-works

    You can read anything by Sunforged on SEO techniques and Relache has a hub on earnings, if that's what you are here for.

    Other than that. I do hope you enjoy your time here. smile

    1. AlidaRosa profile image61
      AlidaRosaposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      Thank You for all the feedback. I have started learning . So I moved the comments to the bottom of the page. Thanks again for all your feedback.

      1. Cagsil profile image60
        Cagsilposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        You're welcome. smile

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    Michael E. Hortonposted 6 years ago

    Your hubpage looks great.

  8. Pcunix profile image90
    Pcunixposted 6 years ago

    I'd like to see some additional commentary on what can go wrong and how  to avoid it.

    Failures can be much more interesting than successes.

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    Website Examinerposted 6 years ago

    Post some links to your own hubs, let's see what we'll find.

    1. Pcunix profile image90
      Pcunixposted 6 years ago in reply to this

      I'm sorry, did you think I was being critical?

      I was following up on the suggestions that the hub could be a bit longer.  Adding information on what can go wrong could be one way to do that.

      I probably  should have been more clear about that.

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        Website Examinerposted 6 years ago in reply to this

        I think it was the word "failures" that caused me to respond. I like your new version better. Trying to be a bit protective of the new hubber, that's all.

        1. Pcunix profile image90
          Pcunixposted 6 years ago in reply to this

          I meant cooking failures :-)

          But I see your point and will try to be more careful in the future.

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            Website Examinerposted 6 years ago in reply to this

            Goodness! That is funny!

 
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