I'd like feedback on my article.

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   Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years ago

   Now that I can post again, I've got a new article to give to you.
   https://hubpages.com/politics/Hypotheti … er-Florida
   How do I make my article better?

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      Terrielynn1posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, Ivan, this is a really good article. not much to say. It looks like you did slot of work. I found it very interesting. From a very neutral point of view. I couldn't imagine being in the middle of either one of these storms. So tragic and devastating. I know a couple people who were and their lives will never be the same.

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      TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      APA Style. Answer the question in the first paragraph. That's APA style. You will lose readers, otherwise. Most of us are lazy.  You elucidate and explain further down, but whenever you write a catching headline, make sure you answer the question immediately.

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         Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         you know I cant edit articles on my PS3!

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            TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            That is really sad. I'm sorry.

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               Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               that's ok. I'll figure out a way to edit my article.

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                  TessSchlesingerposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Okay. I also can't work on my phone and sometimes have to wait until I'm on my laptop.

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         Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         I'll address the issue as soon as I get the computer.

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   Jeremy Gillposted 6 years ago

   Here's a few ideas:
   
   1) Be sure to capitalize "united states"
   2) Let's look at this sentence: "9 days before Irma struck Florida, I was predicting something striking Florida." It begins with a number expressed in its numerical form. Not a big deal, but a tickling in the back of my mind says to begin sentences with them written out (Nine vs 9).
   3) First part of this sentence is a bit awkward: " Tropical storm force wind gusts began affecting us at almost 2:00 AM."
   4) Uncapitalize the word issued: "Governor Rick Scott Issued..."
   5) I'd remove the "in my opinion" in this heading: "Harvey's impact on Florida in my opinion." I'd also remove the periods from your headings.
   6) The lengthy text chunk under "Hypothetical Slow-moving Large Category 5 Hurricane Over Florida." may look better if subheadings or other formatting tools are utilized.
   
   Honestly, most of my suggestions are nitpicks, and I had fun reading.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      where in the article is "United States" in lowercase letters? Just asking, because I can't edit articles on my PS3.

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         Jeremy Gillposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Now everything's looking good, so either it was fixed or I'm hallucinating ha.
         
         Tip to quickly locate specific words or phrases: hit your Control and F keys to use the "Find" function, and search for whatever you're looking for. Comes in handy for a variety of websites. And you're welcome, I look forward to your future endeavors.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      And thank you for constructively criticizing my article. Honestly, I've had a renaissance of ideas since Hurricane Irma struck my area in Norland.

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