Will someone please tell me what's wrong with my Mother's Day hub?

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   James M Becherposted 8 years ago

   I'd like to know what's wrong with my Mother's day hub(http://jamesmbecher.hubpages.com/hub/mothers_day-poem)
   It was featured till I noted it had a broken link, which I removed.  Then it got un-featured.  I figured not enough content, so I added more, but it’s still un-featured.    For the life of me, I can’t figure out what’s wrong with it.

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      Sherry Hewinsposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I'm no expert on this, but my hubs have always passed QAP. These are my impressions upon reading your hub.
      
      You have quoted whole poems, that were not written by you. Even though you credit the author, it's not original content.
      
      Your text (excluding poems) is all in one big block. I find this distracting and hard to read (not sure it has anything to do with being unfeatured.)
      
      Also, the text seems to ramble, being unfocused. Think about what you want to say, and who your target audience is. Content is not just about word count; it's about having something to say.

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      calculus-geometryposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Remove most of the products and fix the sections that are written all in bold italics.  HP has made it pretty clear they don't like product links anymore and will only tolerate only a couple well-placed and well-integrated products that are essential to the hub.  This seems to be an issue with a lot of your hubs that were migrated from Squidoo.

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      bravewarriorposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      James, your poem is beautiful and should stand on its own. I'd delete all those that were not written by you. After all, you're providing links to other compilations (which I don't think is necessary; you want yours to shine, not attract readers to others' work). Remove all the product links. Rather than include an Amazon link to the meaning of Mother's Day, perhaps you could include a sidebar with a brief history of how the holiday came to be.
      
      Also, not including the links, I counted a minimum of 42 instances where you used the word "poem". That many references disrupts the read and screams redundancy. It could also be considered keyword stuffing by HP and Google.
      
      Poetry does not fall prey to the minimum word count. There's no need to stuff the page with unnecessary words.

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 8 years agoin reply to this

      I took a look at your article and can see why it is not being featured:
      
      You cannot use quoted material to form the bulk of an article because those works are not your own.  HP requires all writing to be mostly original content.  Your hub does not meet that requirement.
      
      Secondly, you have not divided your sections into titled capsules.  As a result, your writing looks like one big bunch of words, even though you have used some paragraphs.
      
      You have not accredited your photos.
      
      Finally, your hub looks disorganized to me.  I got lost somewhere around the middle because you kept throwing words and sentences in instead of organizing them into groups.
      
      You really need to take the time to read some articles by other writers here and look at the various ways they organize and present their work.
      
      This article would be terrific if you used only your own poetry along with some of my other suggestions here. 
      
      Best of luck to you, and I hope this helps.

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      erorantesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hello mister James. I. Saw the pictures on your hub. I believe you need to have original pictures. Pictures , you took .  You need to read the learning center at hub pages. The first picture have the website address on the front.   Broken links are website address on your hub .  Good luck. I like your hub.

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   SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

   I don't write poetry, so I might be off here, but wouldn't it help if you moved this hub out of the holidays section and into the poetry section? IIRC, just about anything goes in the poetry section.
   
   I also agree with what has already been suggested about removing poems that aren't yours and removing most of the products for sale.

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   Dressage Husbandposted 8 years ago

   Jim, others have provided some very good ideas. This type of Lens did not translate well to being a Hub. The general rule here is no more than 2 directly related links and that was your biggest issue. Also they are very strict about using even correctly attributed work. Hubs do have to be mainly original work.
   
   Finally although when we came over from Squidoo they did allow one Amazon product per 50 words they now appear to only be allowing one or two (maybe three) directly related products. I think the best advice was to move it to poetry as the main topic and thereby remove the 1500 word ideal.
   
   Your poem was excellent and could stand alone. I did find your preamble rather long and this could be keeping your visitors from reading the whole Hub. Think in terms of a 15 second attention span tops, and that will help you present in a more dynamic way. Good luck with getting this one up to snuff. Your thoughts and feelings about Mothers are exemplary.

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