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Proofreading on my Hub: Domestic Violence: Causes and Consequences

  1. Cricrinel profile image69
    Cricrinelposted 13 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please proofread my Hub Domestic Violence: Causes and Consequences (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thank you in advance!!!

    1. SakinaNasir53 profile image97
      SakinaNasir53posted 13 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Cricrinel! ☺
      Your hub is good. I would suggest the following points.

      1. Write about something that you're truly passionate about or have knowledge in. Don't you think people might find a tons of articles on abuse?

      2. Make sure your pictures are in the public domain  (copyright free). Pixabay, Pexels.com and Morguefile.com are great to use. Flickr is great too. Read Marisa Wright's hub on how to use Flickr properly.

      3. Add revelant videos, tables and callout capusles wherever necessary. Polls are good too.

      4. You can an app like Grammarly to spellcheck your hub. I find some grammatical mistakes.

      5. You can include suggestions in solving abuse, if you plan to stick with this.

      Hope this helps. Good luck! ☺

      1. Cricrinel profile image69
        Cricrinelposted 13 months agoin reply to this

        Dear Sakina,

        Thank you so much for your feedback! I believe I covered all your points in my article. Additionally, I'm a criminal psychologist so I have knowledge about any kind of crimes. I'm writing this article so people can be aware of the situation of domestic violence and in the end of the article I provide advises to people what to do in such cases.  Do you think you can provide me a more specific advice? I would really appreciate it from you.

        Thank you in advance!

        1. SakinaNasir53 profile image97
          SakinaNasir53posted 13 months agoin reply to this

          I think its okay. But you can add more pictures and another video. Leave the italics and bold.

          1. Cricrinel profile image69
            Cricrinelposted 13 months agoin reply to this

            oh great, thank you! I'll give it a try smile

            1. SakinaNasir53 profile image97
              SakinaNasir53posted 13 months agoin reply to this

              Welcome! ☺

    2. RonElFran profile image100
      RonElFranposted 13 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, Cricrinel, and welcome to HubPages.

      Two things I noticed about your article. First, you say you are a criminal psychologist, but you don't have a bio that points this out. In an article like this, having the reader know that you have professional credentials in the subject area makes all the difference in the world. If you have those credentials, you should definitely say so in your bio. And it's not enough to just say you are a criminal psychologist; you need to list any degrees, professional experience, or licenses you have that back up that statement.

      Second, you need to properly attribute your photos. You need to fill in the appropriate fields in the photo capsule to say where you got each photo, and to indicate its copyright status. Obviously, you must not use copyrighted photos without proper permission. Note that the fact that a photo is not marked as copyrighted doesn't mean it's not. Unless the owner of the photo has specifically marked it as public domain or as being under a CC license, you must treat it as being under copyright and not use it without permission.

      Hope this helps.

  2. psycheskinner profile image82
    psycheskinnerposted 13 months ago

    I will be frank here, as a psychologist familiar with the literature on violence I do not think your hub is accurate.  As a small example I would pull out statements like the following:

    "Research shows that children, whose mother was abused, are victims of verbal, physical, psychological or sexual abuse."

    You seem to be stating that all (100%) children of abused mothers are abusde in some way.  this is not correct, some abusers are indiscriminate and abuse all household members, others are very specific and abuse some whilst favoring others.  You need to step back from stating this correlation as 100% when the highest empirically-based estimate is 75% and the most reliable estimates are below 50% (See McKay 1994, Eddleson 1999) for a review, and individual studies that are more recent--pay most attention to research with large sample sizes based on diverse populations.  Most of the children probably do *observe* abuse, which is in itself damaging.

    "Moreover, abused women have high possibilities to abuse their children."

    If by "high" you mean "over 50%" (the received statistical use of the word) this is also untrue. In almost all of the cases above the abuser of the child is the same person abusing the mother.  Abuse by the child *by* the victimized mother has only been properly studied by a single researcher (Schechter) and it seem there is an increased risk but not what would statistically be described as "high".--about double baseline, which in the United States amounts to less than one percent.

    In short, if you are going to write on a subject this important, and this sensitive, please cite your sources and make sure they are good ones.  Asserting that women victims of intimate partner violence are probably abusive mothers is, at best, irresponsible.  Language should not be used imprecisely and citations should be provided.