Proof reading of my article

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   jacobkuttytaposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I am from India and English is my second language.  Someone whose first language is English please proofread this article and suggest any changes required.  I have tried a software to proofread this article and it suggested some changes.  Please look for other possible mistakes and comment.
   
   Thanks in advance for your help.  Here is the link: http://hub.me/ampxT
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: http://hub.me/ampxT

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Okay, I have to ask you: have you made $1,000,000 in a year? If you haven't, then you shouldn't be writing this kind of article.
      
      That's the first question any reader will be asking.
      
      You describe a goal of $15,000 in a year and break down what you need to earn an hour. What happened to the million?
      
      You don't mention a million in the article at all. That means you haven't written 'to the title'. In other words, your title is nothing more than clickbait.
      
      Please rethink your title and change it to reflect the actual content.

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         jacobkuttytaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for your reply.
         
         This is a motivational hub and to get more visitors, I have to give an appealing heading.
         
         If you want to make 1 Million, you can divide it into monthly, weekly and daily goals and look for ways or ask the question like What can I do to earn $20000 a day?  And do the work?
         
         By the way, you did not tell anything about the proofreading side for which I have posted this thread.
         
         If there is any mistake or correction required, please let me know
         
         Thanks once again for visiting the hub

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            lobobrandonposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            The proofreading is secondary, the article does not talk about the topic you say you are writing about. Click Bait titles do not work here unless you actually cover what you are talking about.

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               jacobkuttytaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               This is an experiment to see how many page views will get a topic like this
               
               Thanks for your comment

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                  poppyrposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  The most likely scenario is that you’ll get people clicking and then immediately leaving when it’s clear you have no idea what you’re talking about.

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            poppyrposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            There is a big difference between "an appealing heading" and clickbait. An article MUST be true to its title.
            
            You go back and forth mentioning a million and a billion. They are not the same. And as Bev said, you mentioned $15,000 in an example instead of the aforementioned million.
            
            Also, your article isn't about how to make money. It's just a vague attempt at inspiration. "Take action. Do it now. Do it today not tomorrow. Procrastination will not help you." Yes, and what? Telling someone to get up and do the thing isn't a guide on becoming a millionaire in a year.
            
            I'd recommend writing about something else. You're from India; what are some good sightseeing spots near where you live? Local food, festivals, or religious beliefs? These are the things you know a lot about and people will be interested to read something about India if the writer herself is from India.
            
            As for proofreading, people normally expect payment for their services. You might find a kind soul on here who will help you for free, but it's unlikely someone will put in their free time for nothing.

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               jacobkuttytaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Many thanks for your recommendations.  I never thought of it.

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                  poppyrposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  You’re welcome. Lots of people travel to India so they might enjoy reading about your local area. Good luck!

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      TIMETRAVELER2posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Before you try to write articles on an English language site, you need to be skilled in the use of that language.  You cannot and should not count on other people to correct your errors.  I strongly suggest that you take an in depth course in English grammar, structure and composition before trying to produce a product for public consumption.  This site is a business.  Writers get paid to produce well written articles.  If you are unable to do this on your own, then you should not try to do so until you have improved your writing skills.

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      greenmindposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      The main problem, as theraggededge quickly pointed out, is how you can claim to know how to make that kind of money in a year if you can't even make it work for yourself. There's a fundamental flaw here that the internet will quickly spot.

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         jacobkuttytaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         I have made some changes to align the hub with the headline.  Now I think the arguments made by me for making a million dollar in a year and the ways are clear and suite the headline.

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            CYong74posted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Put it this way. There will be some people who will click your title, out of curiosity, skepticism, net-naivety, and so on. Like us here, the bulk will quickly get turned-off or disgusted, and click away. Which translates to your bounce rate being very high, and your hub never, ever turning up in search engines.
            
            If you don’t feel this is going to happen, consider you can’t even convince our own community. Using explanations like social experimenting is not going to work; come on, you seriously think that excuse is not old and tired? There are also tons of articles similar to yours. Most people, at least those I know, regard these as spam.
            
            Incidentally, you do not have any actual arguments. Sorry to be blunt. You're hypothesizing.

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   DrMark1961posted 6 years ago

   Although many people suggest using that software to correct your mistakes, it really only works for those that are already native English speakers and do not need much proofreading.
   You are not going to be very successful at this site until you get someone else to review your articles before publishing. Do you have an American or British school teacher at the town or city you live in? Maybe they would be willing to help.
   As far as finding someone here to go line by line and correct all of the errors in your hub, it is probably not going to happen here unless you pay for it. A person who does editing wants to make a million a year too, not work for free.
   There is also the aspect of whether this will get any traffic even after you fix it. I do not think so. Please read poppyr´s suggestions about things you can write about and think about working on something else. (I am sure that I could write articles about how to lie in the sand and get a tan, etc, but I do not think they are going to get traffic so I do not do so.)

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      CYong74posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      This is true. Software like Grammarly, no matter what their own people say, are but correction software. They aren't writing software.
      
      I can easily throw 5-10 examples of how Grammarly would either miss an error, or worse, recommend something erroneous.
      
      Short of it, if you don't possess the actual language skill, it's not going to work.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   The other likely scenario is that it won't get passed by QAP, for the reasons already given. Or they will pass it and it will simply be kept in the holding pen of Hubpages.com where it won't attract any traffic at all
   
   The aim, these days, is to have articles moved to a network site where they will attract readers and earn some money.

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