Help needed with title and author bio

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   SakinaNasir53posted 6 years ago

   Hello everyone!
   
   I need some help with the title and author bio of this hub. The editor who has reviewed my article says that I need to use the APA guidelines, work on the spelling and grammar, condense the information and also has pointed out these things additionally:
   
   1. Please revise your title so that it more accurately reflects your article's content.
   
   2. Also, revise your About the Author bio so that it adds credibility to this specific topic (Kuwait).
   
   Here is the link to my hub:
   
   https://hubpages.com/education/History- … -of-Kuwait

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   lobobrandonposted 6 years ago

   "Sakina is in her final year of an English Literature BA and has tutored Arab students too. She writes on pets, health, food, and life."
   
   This does not explain why you know about Kuwait, create a bio telling people you lived in Kuwait and therefore have the knowledge to write about it.
   
   Go here: http://capitalizemytitle.com/ Click on APA and paste in your titles and headings of capsules to get them in APA style.
   
   Hope others can help you with the rest of your questions.

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much lobobrandon for helping me out.

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   simplehappylifeposted 6 years ago

   Maybe something like this for your bio?  "Sakina is in her final year of an English Literature BA and while living in Kuwait, teaches English to Arab students."

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   simplehappylifeposted 6 years ago

   or...
   "Sakina is in her final year of an English Literature BA. She currently lives in Kuwait, & teaches English to Arab students in her spare time."
   
   I didn't check if that is too many characters.

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you SA Willaims for helping me out.

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   simplehappylifeposted 6 years ago

   I thought your title was fine, but maybe something like,
   
   "The History of Life in Kuwait"
   
   "The History of Kuwait"

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   simplehappylifeposted 6 years ago

   or, "The Struggles and Progression of Kuwaiti Culture"

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      That's nice.

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   simplehappylifeposted 6 years ago

   very interesting article by the way   I've been to Kuwait (a very long time ago) and had no idea what they have gone through <3

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you SA Williams for appreciating.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   Sakina, do you understand that you can write several different bios?  Go to "My Account", then click on "About the Author", and you will see where you can create them.  Then you assign them to specific Hubs.
   
   What HubPages wants is for you to write a bio that shows why you are qualified to write on that specific subject.  So, for instance, on my dance Hubs I have a bio that says:
   
   "Marisa Wright is an Australian writer and dancer with nearly 40 years' experience in ballet, jazz, flamenco, ballroom, Latin and bellydance."
   
   but on my Hub about cataracts, none of that would be relevant, so I've written a special bio that says,
   
   "When my husband needed cataract surgery, I struggled to find information on after-care. This article is the result of my hours of research."
   
   So in this case, your bio needs to show why you are a good person to write about Kuwait.   You might say something like, "Sakina Nasir has lived in Kuwait for 14 years and enjoys researching its history and culture".   
   
   Then if you write more Hubs about Kuwait (which I think you should), you would use that same bio for those Hubs.

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much Marisa, this helped a lot. I will change my bio as well.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   Some more comments about the Hub:
   
   I would suggest "The History and Economy of Kuwait" as a title (don't forget to change the heading "Occupations" in the Hub).
   
   I think I may have been the person who suggested using Callout capsules for headings.   HubPages has changed its mind about those now - on my most recent Hub, I was asked to remove all of them and use the capsule headings instead!   
   
   You don't need the caption "the map of the country Kuwait" under the map.
   
   I think your biggest problem is that you still have an irrelevant introduction about camels, and that is confusing the moderator.   Ask yourself, what do camels have to do with the title? Nothing, so delete all of that section. 
   
   Your section about unbearable living conditions is also in the wrong place..  Talk about how the Bedouins settled first, then talk about how hard the living conditions were for them, and perhaps also how they overcame them (if you know).   Why did they settle there if it was so harsh?  Explain that - maybe they had no alternative, because the camels could not travel during the drought, but that needs to be explained as part of the story, so it's clear why you are mentioning it.
   
   The poll is rather meaningless, I would delete it.  You could have one at the end asking people if they would like to visit Kuwait after reading your Hub.
   
   The title of the Hub is "History..."  so you don't need a callout capsule and a title both saying the same thing.  Delete both.

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      SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much Marisa, you have explained everything so well, I will make the edits as soon as possible. You're right, it does seem confusing, thank you for pointing out the mistakes.
      
      Also, I ask about this advice of yours:
      
      "(don't forget to change the heading "Occupations" in the Hub)."
      
      So, I should change "Occupations" to "Economy". Right?

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         Marisa Wrightposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Yes, I think so.

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            SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you Marisa.

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      Ashish Dadgaaposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      @Marisa Wright,
      
      Very nicely described. I liked the way you said this and made it understand. This multiple bio thing happened after a launch of niche sites, am I correct?

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    Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

    One more thing.
    
    I was confused about why you had chosen to number your paragraphs in both versions of this Hub.  Then I remembered - HubPages has said they like numbered lists.
    
    That does not mean numbered sentences! 
    
    Numbering is only appropriate if you can offer a LIST of some kind.   For instance, "Five Historical Sites to Visit in Kuwait".   You can't just write a paragraph of information and then number the sentences.

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       SakinaNasir53posted 6 years agoin reply to this

       Marisa, I have removed the numbering from the paragraphs I had written under "History", as you had advised me last time. Actually, this hub was written when I had newly joined, that's why it's confusing in some portions.

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