I'd like feedback on my Hub: Food Preservation and Storage - Fresh Fruits

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  1. Fx777 profile image58
    Fx777posted 18 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Food Preservation and Storage - Fresh Fruits (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 18 months agoin reply to this

      Wow, that's a hub and a half!

      This has great potential but at the moment there are several issues with it.

      I'll start with the images. Remove the second image. It is unnecessary and too 'arty'. Drop the first down below your introductory paragraph. The second image of the jars is too much like the first. Find another one - perhaps a preserving pan or jam making or something. Also delete the image capsule titles.

      Videos. Remove the fruit picking one - it has nothing to do with the topic of preserving.

      Amazon. Remove the cookbook. It has nothing to do with the topic.

      Ratings capsule. Remove it - it is only for recipe hubs.

      Onto the text and writing. You need a proper introduction that explains what the hub is about, why the topic is important and why the reader should keep reading. It's your chance to hook your reader and keep them on the page.

      Look at the layout of your text. I think it's confusing. Under the sub-heading 'Fruits Preservation' you have descriptions of some fruit and veg. That is acting as your current introduction. The text does not match the heading. That section seems to be broken up by the unnecessary video - can you see how confusing it looks?

      Then there's another bit about bananas. This means that I have to scroll back up to see what you already wrote.

      What you need to do is create a logical outline on paper or in a word document. Move the text around until it all comes under the right subheadings and sections. Keep all the info on each particular food item together. In other words, you must create a structure into which you can put the information.

      You might want to use separate text capsules for each food. At the moment the interspersed italic text looks messy. That will give you the opportunity to add useful keywords in the headings, such as "How to Preserve Bananas" and "The Best Method to Preserve Citrus Fruit".

      Please delete or reword this, "The housewives would be doing valuable service to the country by preserving native foods at home for the following reasons:"

      Your readers will come from all over the world. They are people, not 'housewives'. Generally speaking, 'housewives' is rather derogatory and sexist these days, so please don't call your readers that. 'The country...' not relevant to your readership.

      Be careful of 'talking down' to your readers. Most of them will be highly intelligent, progressive people looking for information, so telling them that preserving food is a profitable use of their leisure time is a little condescending. Remember you are writing mainly for a Western audience. Better to mention the benefits of saving money, making use of seasonal produce, and conserving nutrients.

      I think I would put the preserving methods at the top of the hub and then the individual foods below.

      The terms used in food preparation are not necessary. 99% of people will know what they are anyway. There are several errors in that list in any case.

      A short conclusion would be a good idea.

      This could be a really useful article if you tidied it up worked on the issues listed above.

      Hope that helps.

      1. Fx777 profile image58
        Fx777posted 18 months agoin reply to this

        Good day Bev (theraggededge),

        Your valuable suggestions are great! Your help is greatly appreciated.

        Thank you so much

    2. Jason mackenzie profile image66
      Jason mackenzieposted 18 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, very informative hub, but how about providing a short and sweet intro on the topic before starting with all the various fruits?

      Secondly I observed a number of extra spaces, for example - 'As soon as fruit is cut, it starts losing nutrients.  Try buying...' I think after full-stop there are two spaces when ideally there should be only one.

      Thirdly, this sentence - 'Apples should be firm, not bruised, wrinkle-free, and good in color.' It would need to be spelled as 'colour' and rather than write 'good in colour' how about being more specific, like red in colour, bright red in colour and so on.

      Hope I have been helpful, thanks, regards...

      1. Fx777 profile image58
        Fx777posted 18 months agoin reply to this

        Thank you, Jason, for your input. Very helpful indeed!


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