I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub How To Relieve Stress-5 TOP TIPS (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!
Too many Amazon capsules. HP seems to prefer one capsule and one inline Amazon link. Max.
Apart from that, there are grammatical errors throughout. Lots of them. Too many to mention. Almost every sentence is grammatically incorrect. For example, sub-heading - you call people ON the phone, not in it.
Some suggestions to improve your article:
Copy the text into Grammarly to fix some grammar, and then Hemingway to tighten up the writing.
Delete the negative references to WW3 and the rest.
Don't ask your reader if s/he is a bully.
You've omitted some really important stress relievers: turn off the news, sit quietly, get enough sleep, go for a walk, pet the cat, etc.
Your article is titled 5 Top Tips, but you have included many more than that. Additionally your numbering is mixed up with lettering, which makes it all very confusing.
Capitalisation of sub-titles is inconsistent. Title case is best.
Top tip: fix the grammar!
Hope that helps.
Hi Cuevas, could not read it,but had a brief look. Your topic is how to relieve stress. One of the solutions is stress relief toys and the content has amazon advertisements to all of them. That's not allowed.
If you are writing specifically about a toy like fidget cube, fidget spinner etc,then you can put the advertisement-even that has terms though. BTW article is interesting on the outside. You are quite clever.
Thanks a lot, theraggededge! I already fixed the grammar of the article, somehow. Thanks as well for informing me about the Title case. What do you mean by WW3?
All the gloomy stuff about a possible World War. You're writing an uplifting article, you don't need to sink people's spirits before you get going. That would be sufficient to get me to click the Back button. Every adult knows what stress is; don't add to it.
You go from all that heavy stuff into stress-reliever toys - it seems incongruous. If I was truly worried sick about a confrontation with Korea, or diagnosed with some chronic illness, being told I need a fidget spinner would make me throw my laptop through the window. I'd suggest you move the toys to the end.
Edit: by the way, the grammar isn't fixed, and you have some awkward phrasing going on...
"Looking at either the bigger or the smaller picture, everything today is very stressful. Stressed because of the unbelievable happening in our world? or stressed from your school and/or your workplace? Which one from the two you are experiencing?"
1. The 'bigger or smaller picture' doesn't say anything. They are 'waffly words'.
2. Not everything is stressful.
3. Happenings. With an 's'. Or (with an uppercase O).
4. Which of the two...
5. There are only two reasons to be stressed? World events or work/school? How about being a parent? Being poor. Being separated from your family? Commuting? Feeling a lack of time? Being ill?
I'd rewrite this to:
Stress is part of life today, and almost everyone experiences it at one time or another. Work, school, world events, illness, lack of time, financial pressures and even family life can contribute to stress.
Then I would lose the next three paragraphs because I just covered everything in that single paragraph above, and go straight to the effects of stress, beginning, "Don't just consider stress unimportant." Lose 'just', it's one of those nothing words - it weakens your writing.
Hi! pen promulgates, thank you for always commenting on my posts and always helping me. I appreciate it a lot.
And also, it says that my article has spammy elements. What could those possibly be? Please help me sort that out.
I told you - too many Amazon capsules. One capsule, one in-line link is sufficient. HubPages is trying to get people to use fewer Amazon links. More capsules generally means fewer sales because it makes the hub look like one big advertisement.
Spammy elements are links, products, and text.
When you get the email from QAP team, they mention links.. Follow and read them. They won't say what's exactly spammy. But the link gives all explanation for us to figure out.
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