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I'd like feedback on my article: Quaker Parrots - Caring For Your Amazing Parrot

  1. Susan Sears profile image82
    Susan Searsposted 6 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Quaker Parrots - Caring For Your Amazing Parrot (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. Jeremy Gill profile image88
      Jeremy Gillposted 6 weeks ago in reply to this

      Here are some suggestions:

      1) Be consistent with capitalization. Under the "Foods to Avoid" section, some sentences are capitalized and some aren't.
      2) There aren't many, but watch for spelling errors, like vegtable in the "Healthy Treats for your Quaker" table.
      3) Avoid titling capsules as "Conclusion" or in this case "In Closing." Your writing will speak for itself. Perhaps title the paragraph "My Quaker, Levi" or  something similar.

      You've definitely put some effort in since the last edits and it shows, well done. Best of luck.

      1. Susan Sears profile image82
        Susan Searsposted 6 weeks ago in reply to this

        Thank you Jeremy Icwill make the changes you suggested.

  2. Marisa Wright profile image96
    Marisa Wrightposted 6 weeks ago

    Move the sections on "History" and "Interesting Facts about the Quaker" to the END of the Hub.  They are background information, and have nothing to do with the subject of your Hub - which is caring for your parrot. 

    The "Danger Danger" section - I recommend using a Callout Capsule and putting the words "Danger Danger" in it. It will make it stand out more.   

    Then, you can use normal headings for the various dangers instead of bullet points - that will make it a lot easier to read.   And I would move Teflon to make it the last danger (and then you can still use bullet points for the different utensils that contain it). 

    The problem with your last Amazon capsule is that you don't say enough about why you recommend the book.   You've covered so much in the article, what does the book offer that you haven't already explained?   Make that clear.  Say something which demonstrates that you really have read the book and know what it's about.

    For the "food that Levi eats" section - if you are going to use a link instead of a capsule, you need to make it a natural part of the text.   So you would put the reference in the first paragraph, where you say, "I feed my pet....."   It would look like this:

    "With that being said, a parrot needs a well-balanced and varied diet, both for their health and their instinctive foraging. I feed my pet Small Bird Food - it contains pellets, seeds, dried fruits, and vegetables. This type of food provides the varied diet and allows my Quaker, Levi, to have the foraging experience."

    1. Susan Sears profile image82
      Susan Searsposted 6 weeks ago in reply to this

      Marisa,
      Thank you for the advise! I have learned a lot off of what you have told me. I was wondering are you able to see the changes I have made? If so could you tell me what you think now?
      Thanks,
      Susan

      1. Marisa Wright profile image96
        Marisa Wrightposted 6 weeks ago in reply to this

        Looking good!    One small thing - put your 'Danger Danger" in the heading section of the Callout Capsule, it will look bigger - and try it with the Colorbox setting.

        1. Susan Sears profile image82
          Susan Searsposted 6 weeks ago in reply to this

          Just wanted to let you know that it finally went through and is featured smile Thank you for all of your help!

  3. pen promulgates profile image80
    pen promulgatesposted 6 weeks ago

    Wonderful.

 
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