I'd like feedback on my article: Uber vs OLA: The Indian battlefield

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  1. Ankush Mukherjee profile image84
    Ankush Mukherjeeposted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Uber vs OLA: The Indian battlefield (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve?
    I have edited the blog over 7 times, each time it is showing the blog contains spammy content, please guys review it and revert, a big thanks in advance!!

    1. Jeremy Gill profile image94
      Jeremy Gillposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      Hate to say it, but you'll need more editing to pass the QAP. Here are some suggestions:

      1) Be consistent with capitalization for your headings, and capitalize the word battlefield in your title.
      2) Avoid overly large chunks of text. Breaking them into separate paragraphs hardly helps; insert more photos/videos, or at least use some bullet points, especially near the end.
      3) Remove unnecessary blank space between text and photos.

      I'm not sure what spammy elements are being referred to (there aren't any spammy Amazon capsules, for instance), but further editing will help regardless. Best of luck.

      1. Ankush Mukherjee profile image84
        Ankush Mukherjeeposted 11 months agoin reply to this

        Can you please be specific as in what do when Hubpages is showing "spammy content" in my blog?

        1. Marketing Merit profile image96
          Marketing Meritposted 11 months agoin reply to this

          Have a read here:
          http://hubpages.com/about/newsletter/2014-12-04

          It is often links or Amazon capsules. However, topics may be considered spammy, as is keyword stuffing.
          I can't help wondering if the editor feels that you are promoting a business/businesses.
          Nonetheless, you will still have to address the issues raised above, in order to pass QAP.

          1. Ankush Mukherjee profile image84
            Ankush Mukherjeeposted 11 months agoin reply to this

            There was a feedback from a moderator telling to proofread my hub, now what parameters should I check for proofreading?

            1. Marketing Merit profile image96
              Marketing Meritposted 11 months agoin reply to this

              You're looking for grammatical, spelling and punctuation errors firstly. Next, check that what you've written actually makes sense. Following on from this, read through your work and refine it as necessary.

              It's been suggested many times on this forum, but you would benefit from free online checkers such as Grammarly and Hemingway. There are also many others, if you want to search for them online.

              Finally, ensure that none of your work has been inadvertently copied from another site. All articles must be original text. Hope this helps!

              1. Ankush Mukherjee profile image84
                Ankush Mukherjeeposted 11 months agoin reply to this

                Thanks for all the inputs

                Got it published and featured

                https://hubpages.com/politics/How-can-t … an-economy

    2. Marketing Merit profile image96
      Marketing Meritposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      In addition to what Jeremy has said, you have not stated the source of your photos and it is unclear if you have permission to use them.

  2. pen promulgates profile image56
    pen promulgatesposted 11 months ago

    Hello, welcome to. HP.

    The second line itself has a grammatical error.

    'Its acquiring customers' should be 'it's acquiring customers.'

    Then you have written
    'Lets have a look at why they had a customer acquiring spree in India in the last few years'

    It's let's not lets.
    Secondly, the verb (have) is missing here.
    The use of tenses must be appropriate. Verbs and tenses must only change when there is a time shift.

    In your sentence, the action has continued from the past to the present with the emphasis on the result, so the tense must be present perfect.

    'Let's have a look at why they have had a customer acquiring spree in India in the last few years' is the right form.

    Well this should not matter much, but it certainly defames any article.
    You wrote deep discounts in the first line. What is deep discount? Of course, we know what you mean to say, but it's awkward phrasing. Simply right 'huge discount' or 'economical price' or 'affordable rates.'

    'Most of them don't even own a two-wheeler, creating a demand for cabs for their travel requirements.'
    The fact that people don't own two-wheeler has created the demand, so link the sentence appropriately.
    'Most of them don't even own a two-wheeler; this has created a demand for cabs for their travel requirements.'

    'Non availability of good cab service: Before the OLAs and Ubers took over Indian market there was a dearth of good cab service.'
    Colon does not justify the sentence.
    (If that's a point, use a bullet or put it as a heading). The same suggestion applies to the next point as well (Inadequate Public Transport System) and (No complaint by local taxi operators). Put a space after all the paragraphs before the headings.

    'Drivers shifted from radio cabs and conventional taxis to online cab service providers.' You can reword this as:
    'Drivers shifted from radio cabs and conventional taxis to online cab services.' keep the nouns in the same format.

    They now preferred a luxurious ride with an OLA or a Uber' should be 'They now prefer a luxurious ride with an OLA or a Uber'

    Honestly, this entire paragraph must be in present perfect tense.

    "Ideas change lives", doesn't need a comma but a period.

    Like these there are more sentences to rework. I recommend you read my hub 'how your sentence structure can fail you in quality.' if you feel like.

    Good luck.

    1. Ankush Mukherjee profile image84
      Ankush Mukherjeeposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks for all the inputs

      Got the hub published

      https://hubpages.com/politics/How-can-t … an-economy

  3. pen promulgates profile image56
    pen promulgatesposted 11 months ago

    Congrats, looks much better now smile

 
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