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I'd like feedback on my article: Jesus Healed Them All! - Putting Our...

  1. Jackie Lynnley profile image88
    Jackie Lynnleyposted 4 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article [url=https://hubpages.com/literature/Jesus-Healed-Them-All]Jesus Healed Them All! -
         Putting Our Faith in Prayer.[/url]. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. k@ri profile image88
      k@riposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      I loved this article.  I will go back and look at it again.  smile

      1. k@ri profile image88
        k@riposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        Under “Friends so Dear” the second paragraph is all one sentence.  I feel it is run-on. 
        The next sentence, “On my worst day yet” needs a comma after yet. 
        Under “Is There Any Gift Better than Prayer” I feel the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph is run-on.  In the 3rd paragraph the sentence starting, “We should all have someone…” is run-on.
        The next paragraph, the Bible quote, has quote marks in the beginning, but not at the end.
        Under “Losing the Will to Live”, the first sentence says, “mush”, but I think you mean “must”.  In the 3rd paragraph, the sentence starting with, “Multiply that by 800,000”, seems run-on to me.
        I have heard the editors do not like “bold” text.  Maybe use a callout?
        I am not very secure doing this, lol.  I think maybe the first part needs a little more focus?  Anyway, here is this and Good Luck!

    2. Michael-Duncan profile image91
      Michael-Duncanposted 3 weeks agoin reply to this

      The link is broken, the article seems to have been removed.

 
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