I'd like feedback on my article: The Lighted Window

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  1. Sampad Bose profile image82
    Sampad Boseposted 9 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article The Lighted Window (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. VVanNess profile image94
    VVanNessposted 9 months ago

    I'm not sure why you are not passing the Quality Assessment Process. First things first, I would check your grammar and punctuation.

    Several times in your story you had back to back quotes as someone was still speaking. (" The lighted window was not my inspiration Gracy!" "Its always been my elixir of life." "I remember the days if a wire short-circuited and I missed the lighted window." "You never let me down, the candle wick flickered." " As if you waved to say, yes Roy carry on the best days are ahead.") If a character is still speaking, each comment does not need separate quotes. It should all be contained within the same quotes unless separated by the words Roy said or something similar.

    I noticed that a handful of times you had incomplete sentences (Always behind the painting, behind the "Lighted Window.") or the wrong punctuation behind a sentence (but where were you.).

    Also, it didn't bother me but may be bringing your score down, your pictures are fuzzy and unclear. You may try finding more crisp photos for your story.

    Finally, I would add a biography to the top of your story. That probably doesn't make a difference on the Quality Assessment though.

    Good luck! Great story but very sad.

  3. Sampad Bose profile image82
    Sampad Boseposted 9 months ago

    Dear Victoria,
    This is my first publicity of the short story. I have been writing for my own self. It's been my hobby only
    I have again polished my story "T Lighted Window" let's see if I can pass the QAP.
    Please guide me with your valued comments.

  4. Sampad Bose profile image82
    Sampad Boseposted 9 months ago

    My story "The Lighted Window" new status, Published & Featured.
    Thanks for showing concern on earlier status of QAP, and guidelines for improvement.
    Sampad Bose

  5. VVanNess profile image94
    VVanNessposted 9 months ago

    I'm so glad I could help!!

  6. Sampad Bose profile image82
    Sampad Boseposted 9 months ago



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