I'd like feedback on my article: The four greeting methods

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   Ilhamelhamdaouiposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article The four greeting methods (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   Venkatachari Mposted 7 years ago

   The first thing is, put the first letter of each word in the Title or the sub-titles with Capital letters.
   
   The second point is, give one space after each sentence.
   
   There are grammar mistakes in every paragraph. Many sentences are only half statements. They are not complete.
   
   In the starting sentence, remove the stop and continue it to make a full sentence (by placing a comma) removing "So" and replace the word "done" with "best suited" or "beneficial".
   
   Replace the words "in order" with "By doing so".
   
   The next line "In this sense we are going to...." does not make any sense. You can make it "For this purpose, I am going to tell you about the top four tips of greeting......".
   
   Correct similar grammar mistakes all over the article.
   
   The quote by Kofi Annan ... the word "different colored skin"- is it okay? Verify that quote if  " different-colored" is a single word.
   
   The photos are good except that 5th one, which does not cover the entire width of the page. You should remove it or replace it with a wider photo.

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   Ilhamelhamdaouiposted 7 years ago

   I really appreciate your help thank you .

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   DrMark1961posted 7 years ago

   Ahlen. La bas? This is looking a lot better than your first two articles but it still has a way to go in order to be approved.
   Are you familiar with the grammar checking programs like grammarly? They will point out your grammar mistakes. The first sentence starts out "If you are interested to visit an Arab country" when it should be "If you are interested in visiting an Arab country". It may seem like a small mistake, but many of your readers will bounce right out of your article and go read elsewhere. There can be no significant grammar errors and a program like Grammarly will help you find them.
   Numerous misspellings, like "kises" in the subtitle about Kisses on the Head and Hands". It would help a lot to have an English speaker look at this. If you are in Casa or Rabat, there are plenty of English speakers around. If not, try at a local school and get a second opinion before publishing.
   Subtitles need to be written in APA title case. You can cut and paste your title to this program, check the APA style, and it will correct it for you. https://capitalizemytitle.com/
   Pictures with watermarks are not allowed. You have to delete those. Find creative commons photos at other sites like pixabay.
   -former Ouarzazi

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      Ilhamelhamdaouiposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      labas lhamdollah, that is wonderful  It seems that you have a knowledge  about   my country language and culture and even famous cities ,Thanks for correcting my article. I will take your advices in consideration.

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