I'd like feedback on my article: 10 Places In Nepal You Must Visit Before You...

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   Saurav Shahposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article 10 Places In Nepal You Must Visit Before You Die (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      aesta1posted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Saurav, I had been to Nepal and these are beautiful places. I suggest that you ask an English teacher to help you improve your work. I think if you are based in Nepal, you need to take your own pictures. It would be much better. If not, there are places to get them like Wikimedia or Pixabay but you have to be careful about attributing the article and copying from Google is a no-no. You may have visited some of these places so describe yourown experience. Including an Amazon capsule does not stop at placing the book but you must write something about your own assessment after reading the book. As AliciaC has already suggested, follow the link she added to give you an idea of the standards in HP.

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         Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Excellent Idea. Show that OP that he needs better English skills. Google is a no-no. I once copied from Google, and I got reprimanded for it. Excellent job.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      May I suggest replacing "under discourse" with "undiscovered"? Or does discourse really mean under a lot of stress? Your grammar is a tad underwhelming. You can't use a Thesaurus to replace simple words with high school words. It doesn't work like that. I suggest copying the text to a grammar checker, such as grammarly. Or use a free grammar check tool. Use it on all of your texts. Trust me, It has helped me a lot. Now, be a good boy and IMPROVE YOUR GRAMMAR AND ARTICLE!!!

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   AliciaCposted 6 years ago

   Your article is potentially very interesting. It contains a number of problems, however. The awkward form of English in the article is one of them. In addition, the section on Lo Manthang is almost identical to the last section at http://www.imnepal.com/mustang-nepal/2/ .
   
   You haven't explained why people should buy the book in the Amazon ad or what the book's benefits and drawbacks are. Another problem is the source of your images. "Google" is not an adequate source. You need to check that the photos have the correct license for use.

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      Saurav Shahposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I understand but where should I take the photos from? And how can I know whether I've correct license for the use of image or not?

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         AliciaCposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         This link may be helpful. https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   HubPages is a platform for writers who have a near-perfect command of English. Unfortunately, your skill with English is not good enough. There are long, convoluted sentences with many words used inappropriately.
   
   Take this sentence:
   
   "The amazing territory contains immense mountains aside profound valleys that have been cut into the mountainsides by staggeringly vast ice sheets."
   
   It looks almost as though you have used a Thesaurus to find long words to substitute for short, clear ones. Adjectives are greatly overused.
   
   How about about?
   "There are high mountains next to deep valleys that have been gouged by glaciers."
   
   Do you have permission to use the images? It looks as though you have just plucked them from the Internet. You can't do that.
   
   You need to spend some time at the Learning Center here https://hubpageshelp.com/

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   That's your own blog, Nirajan Ghimire. And the original hub is unpublished. So it looks as if you are trying to do a little self-promotion.
   
   Especially as you have reproduced part of a previous comment by AliciaC
   
   Reported for spamming.

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