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   Ekcedeonposted 7 years ago

   Hello to the entire HubPages community. I have been reading and observing the HubPages forum since I joined. I know most of you are quite busy but if any of you have the time, kindly proofread my article and give me your feedback. I know HubPages is all about quality so, since am new here I need all the help possible. And yes, I have already started to read articles from the learning center and questions and answers posted here.
   Almost forgot, here is the link http://hub.me/am1Bm

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      Your writing is very good.
      
      I would suggest that you make more use of bullet points when the points you are making are short.
      
      Also read your text out loud which helps your brain pick up overlooked errors. There was one paragraph where the first letter wasn't capitalized. I closed the tab down now so can't remember which one. Quite far down the page, I think.

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         Ekcedeonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you theraggededge, for your compliment and more so your suggests to improve my article.
         I'm working on the changes, will let you know when am finished.

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         Ekcedeonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Hi! theraggededge, finished with the changes, leave me your feedback, thank you.

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   DrMark1961posted 7 years ago

   You also need to change your title. It is clumsy and even if someone is looking for this subject and finds your article they are unlikely to click on it because of that title. The reader will assume that the whole article is similar.

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      Ekcedeonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you, Mark,
      Tittle changed from; Best Top 10 Marriage Advice for Christian Couples
      To;10 Marriage Advice for Christian Couples
      it sounds more free-flowing now

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         Natalie Frankposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         10 Marriage Advice doesn't really make sense.  I'd drop the 10 though you could maybe try something like Top 10 Pieces of Marriage Advice . . . or something similar.

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            Ekcedeonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            An excellent suggestion Natalie, thank you

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   peachpurpleposted 7 years ago

   Your SOlution part i that Striking, not obvious. Maybe you can Bold and change the fonts or put them into the callouts

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      Ekcedeonposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      thank you peachpurple, what do you think about the content and its structure?

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