I would like feedback on my article:A Helping Hand

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   Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here's my article:https://hubpages.com/politics/sunpreetkaur1

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      Olufemi Victorposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Great Article sunpreet, at a first glance, i noticed that all your subtitles do not follow the APA format, even though your title does. You can manually edit all the subtitles, or use https://capitalizemytitle.com/ to put each subtitle in the APA format. Welcome again to hubpages.
      
      Also i would advice you to post this again or edit it, your article is not in a link form, i was very lazy about having to copy out the link and paste it in another tab, thats probably why you haven't gotten people's opinion.

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         Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you so much sir.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   What's going on with the URL? Why did you change it?

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      Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      I'll edit it soon. Thank you ma'am.

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         theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         You can't edit the URL. I'm just curious why you changed it to politics/yourname.

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            Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            No, I had to copy and paste the URL as the article was not published and was unable to be found.

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               theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

               That's not what I mean. Generally the URL is the same as the title of the article, but yours has the word 'politics' and your name in it. The article is not political.

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                  Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                  Yes ma'am, I was not able to find any title related to my article. I was compelled to choose one. The nearest that I found was politics and social.

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                     theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

                     Okay, well you create the title first. Then you choose the topic/category. If you can't find what you are looking for, use the search box. In this case, I would suggest 'spirituality' or maybe 'self help'. Usually something will come up that is suitable.
                     
                     The URL is then formed out of those choices. There's no need to add your name in.
                     
                     More help here: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … ng-hubtool

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                        Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                        Thank you ma'am. But I think I can't change it now.
                        Any other improvements for the article?

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                           theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

                           At first glance, I think it looks a little untidy. There is too much italicised and bold text.
                           
                           Remove the period/full stop from the third sub-heading.
                           
                           There are some grammatical errors but they are fairly minor. You could get someone to proofread it for you. Also read the text out loud - that's a good way to pick up any awkward sentences. For example "Lending a helping hand doesn't need any degree." Delete 'any' and put 'a university' or 'a college' in front of degree, otherwise it looks odd.
                           
                           It would be a good idea to include some suggestions for 'selfless deeds' in the section where you tell your reader to do one for five minutes.
                           
                           You don't need the image of Winston Churchill. It doesn't enhance the article. The quote is sufficient.
                           
                           I thought the Clinical Science image was an advert - delete it. Again, it does nothing for the article. You don't need an image for every point you make. All images MUST carry a Creative Commons license. You can't just take them from a web page or Google search.
                           
                           You seem to go off topic with the actor stuff. Martyrs and paramilitary don't belong there. I would delete that whole section.
                           
                           Again, delete those Covid images.
                           
                           I can't emphasise this enough: Stay on topic, i.e. the article is about individuals helping out their friends and family. Stick to that topic and get rid of everything else. You are trying to cover too much. Use no more than two or three well-chose, legal to use images. You can get them from Pixabay.
                           
                           Good luck.

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                              Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                              Thank you so much ma'am. I'll follow these guidelines.

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                                 CYong74posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                 I strongly suggest you make an offline copy of your hub, delete the existing one, do your edits, then republish for review.
                                 
                                 URL is an important SEO factor. It’s not the only factor but if your targeted keywords or topic aren’t in the URL, you’re going to find Google ranking even more difficult.
                                 
                                 To ensure a proper URL, do these:
                                 
                                 - When you click WRITE i.e. the big orange button on the top right, you’d be brought to the preliminary creation screen. This is your ONLY opportunity to determine the URL.
                                 
                                 - Immediately after TITLE, click EDIT. This is beside the permalink.
                                 
                                 - Key in the appropriate URL.
                                 
                                 - If you subsequently have trouble determining the category, then it is a clear sign that your content is too broad, or you haven’t given sufficient thought to what it is that you wish to tell. The HP categories aren’t comprehensive, but for most topics, they do suffice.

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                                    Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                    Ok sir, Thank you

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                              Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                              I have followed your instructions and I have edited the the URL as well.

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                                 theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                 You have changed the category, but the article URL is still your own name. It should really be the title or keywords of the piece.
                                 
                                 You can't edit it. It might be better to do as CYong suggests.
                                 
                                 Also, all that extra non-related material is even more out of place now you have changed the category to 'family and parenting'.

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                                    Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                    Bev, you have given her a lot of valuable information and she has made some changes. But, I am unable to make any contribution to the discussion. I returned yesterday from a funeral function and the hangover...Thank you.

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                                       Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                       Thank you sir.

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                                          Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                                          Welcome to hubpages and try to give your article a good title as the  others were suggesting.

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   Sunpreet Kaur 2001posted 4 years ago

   Ok sir

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