Need help improving hub

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   Kristen Howeposted 7 years ago

   Hi everyone. I recently sent in my summer health article to Healdove last week. It was then sent to Dengarden and declined with the same rejection email. Any ideas on how to make this hub better for resubmittance this fall would be appreciated for either niche. I thought it would be perfect for Healdove though. https://hubpages.com/health/15-Natural- … his-Summer

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      DreamerMegposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      There are a number of odd mistakes, like extortion instead of exertion and similar ones as if text prediction had been making mistakes.

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   DrMark1961posted 7 years ago

   There are some small errors (one of your sentences mentions "decrease level of extortion") but the main problem to me is that the title is deceptive. Your title mentions natural, and then the first thing you talk about is AC. That is natural?

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   Kristen Howeposted 7 years ago

   Okay thanks for the help Mark.  Natural fresh air. I just copied what I had from my notes when I wrote it that mentioned how it's cheap and natural. I guess I can tweak the title though.

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   Kristen Howeposted 7 years ago

   Okay. Mainly typos to fix.

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   Butterfly67posted 7 years ago

   I would say organise the article with numbers - when you quote 21 ways then number each one and give it the same size heading.
   Also yes, in the first para you say 'without raising your utility bills on electrical costs' and then go straight on to talk about AC.
   And yes just read through it really carefully for some other errors.

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   Kristen Howeposted 7 years ago

   Thanks Butterfly. I can do that too. Thanks.

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      Natalie Frankposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I'm wondering if you want to send it to Healdove if you can tweak it to add something a bit more health related. Like at the beginning mentioning the ill effects heat and dehydration can have on your health and how important it is to keep cool when it gets hot.  Then go into all your suggestions and mention again at the end the connection between heat and dehydration and health.  It could just be a paragraph at the beginning and a couple of sentences at the end.  That might help it get into Healdove.

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   Kristen Howeposted 7 years ago

   Thanks Natalie. That just might work. I keep that idea around for my 3 other seasonal health hubs this year.

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