I'd like feedback on my article: Bereavement, Stages of Grief and Coping

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  1. Mehak082 profile image50
    Mehak082posted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: Bereavement, Stages of Grief and Coping (must be signed in to view)

    1. greenmind profile image97
      greenmindposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      The first thing you need to do is fix your first sentence, because readers will see this and immediately bounce: "Bereaved people display ignition and can’t concentrate on their doings and they desire for their loved one."

      Ignition?

  2. Will Apse profile image90
    Will Apseposted 2 months ago

    There is a lot of information in your article but it is a bit of a jumble and hard to follow. I have a feeling that you wrote it rather quickly.

    Your English is good but probably not quite enough yet for a US audience when the subject is complex and requires a nuanced and sensitive approach.

    If you are serious about writing you could probably refine your languages skills with practice.

    Another problem is that the subject has been covered too many times and your approach is too general.

    It may be better to focus on one aspect of the subject and go into more detail. You could try something like "what death means to people in different parts of the world" or any of the other aspects that you touch on.

    I would explore "long tail search terms" if you want traffic from Google and also check out the competition i.e. what has already been published. You will need to produce something better.

    This page has annoying ads but useful info: https://neilpatel.com/blog/long-tail-keywords-seo/

  3. Doneta Wrate profile image91
    Doneta Wrateposted 2 months ago

    Did you take the time to proof read before sending it to QAP?  Mistakes are always made at the beginning.  You need to try to perfect it the best you can before sending it on.  I always proofread mine 3 or 4 times over one or two days and give it some space between each proof read.

  4. Doneta Wrate profile image91
    Doneta Wrateposted 2 months ago

    I agree with greenmind and Will Apse.  Plus I think you need a better introduction and conclusion

  5. Mehak082 profile image50
    Mehak082posted 2 months ago

    thank you very much for suggestions. I will try to incorporate your suggestions.

 
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