I'd like feedback on my article: Some Mind Blowing Tales About Female Psychology

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   hubber8893posted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Some Mind Blowing Tales About Female Psychology (must be signed in to view)

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      greenmindposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Dude...
      
      This will never work here. I have a feeling the Naughty Ladies here will have some constructive criticism for you

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         hubber8893posted 6 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for your feedback Greenmind  but this is just humorous.

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      Will Apseposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Maybe you could reframe the article as a song to acceptance and tolerance, which is what it appears to be anyway.

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      ZxRedposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      It's easy to get lost in your hub. I do not understand what your article's goal is. Another tip: run your article through Grammarly to help you fix some grammatical errors.

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      quotationsposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I skimmed through your article. There are two main problems: 1) it seems to be written in so called "Hinglish" which is not standard English and therefore makes it confusing to read by Americans, Canadians, and Brits. In fact it is incomprehensible in parts and infuriating in others. It's not just a question of grammar but a way of looking at the world and at women which is at odds with the cultural sensibilities of people outside of the Indian subcontinent and while this point of view is okay, it is not what hubpages is looking for because its target audience is the rest of the Anglosphere, and not the Indian subcontinent. 2) the hub itself is rambling and does not deliver what is promised by its title. These are not mind blowing tales about female psychology as much as some character sketches of some women you have crossed paths with. There is too much of the personal and no foundation for you to generalize your observations into a classification of women into these various character types.

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   psycheskinnerposted 6 years ago

   Your hub doesn't seem to make any sense.

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   theraggededgeposted 6 years ago

   What on earth does this mean?
   
   "They like to manage the traditions of society in an offspring manner."
   
   I can't read any further.
   
   Edit: I did read on, sort of. You can't refer to women as 'bikes'. Best advice? Delete it.

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   Sherry Hewinsposted 6 years ago

   I did find this mildly interesting, but I have to agree with everyone else. I can't see any way of making this hub pass QAP.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 6 years ago

   I couldn't get past the opening paragraph. The crimes against English grammar were making my brain hurt.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 6 years ago

   The number one rule at HubPages is to write in near-perfect English. You've got a way to go to reach the required proficiency. Then, you have to deal with content. Random observations about people on buses isn't going to cut it. HP wants magazine-style articles filled with information people are looking for.

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      Jana Louise Smitposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      This is a great comment. HP isn't a blog down memory lane. Steer clear of hubs like this and focus on something that shares tips or information. Remember that gender, racial and religious views are not the same globally. What you find "humorous" could lose you potential followers because they feel offended.

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