I'd like feedback on my article: Unveiling the Ultimate Secret: 10 Mind-Blowing.

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   Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Unveiling the Ultimate Secret: 10 Mind-Blowing Tricks to Make Your Kids Love Learning Forever

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      Kenna McHughposted 24 months agoin reply to this

      You know, I would contact HP Team and ask them directly. I see some awkward phrasing. Perhaps, there are similar articles in this niche. It looks like you're in Discover.

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         Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months agoin reply to this

         Thank you Kenna for the feed back.

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      Miebakagh57posted 24 months agoin reply to this

      The title should be shorten to: '10 Mind Blowing Tricks to Help Your Kids... Forever'.                                                  The introduction is also very long. Make it shorter.                                   Curiously, the body of the article sedms to adopt a sentense and two, a shortest summary of the introduction. Removed it.                                      Seriously, the first point of the read seems okay. But before it is an 'akward statement. Remove it and the others in the next points.                                             The last paragraphe seems to be the conclurion. 'Capsule' it, and enter a capsule for the source of works you consulted. Thanks.

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         Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months agoin reply to this

         Miebakagh57, thank you very much for this feed back. I will go back and check your suggestions.

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   AliciaCposted 24 months ago

   I agree with Kenna. I think you’ve created a good article. Before you contact the staff, you should shorten the title. It’s too long. You should also look for the awkward phrases that Kenna mentions. There aren’t many, but they are noticeable. If these two activities don’t help, you should contact the staff.

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   Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months ago

   Thank you. Your feedback is very useful.

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   melbelposted 24 months ago

   I'd cut the title in half. Maybe something like "10 Mind-Blowing Tricks to Make Your Kids Love Learning"
   
   Also, you have multiple sections but you're also counting in the article. If you have a top ten list, it's a bit awkward to also force them into various sections.

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      Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you. Your suggestion is appreciated.

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         Matt Wellsposted 24 months agoin reply to this

         Your article is now featured!

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            Kenna McHughposted 24 months agoin reply to this

            Great!

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               Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months agoin reply to this

               With the help of your suggestions, I am so happy that my article is now featured. Thank you for all of your suggestions.

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                  Miebakagh57posted 23 months agoin reply to this

                  Congratulations!

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            Felisa Daskeoposted 24 months agoin reply to this

            Thank you.

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