I'd like feedback on my article: You need to Withdraw yourself from Pain

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   Hena Ghoshposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve?  My 3 articles got in Boot camp back to back. I need to know and learn not to repeat the same mistake , I need to know how can I pass the QAP and what is best I can do for that Thanks!
   Here is my article: You need to Withdraw yourself from Pain (must be signed in to view)

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      Mom-Blogsposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Hena. The title of your article doesn't explain what the article is about. Your title must be in sync with the search engines to attract more audience. And also use APA format for heading and subheading.
      As you are trying to help a person to get rid of their depression, you need to give a piece of in-depth information on how to do the same. Your article is having some grammatical errors like improper capitalization of words etc. which must be corrected. Also, try to avoid using short forms of words because many people won't understand it.

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         Hena Ghoshposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         @Mom-blogs
         
         Ahhh!! I see. Yeah, you are right, as I was correcting the grammar and improper format, But yes I will include the APA format too for the headings and subheading. I hope after editing this time, it will be selected for QAP. Thank you for explaining the errors. Have a good day

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            Mom-Blogsposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            Hena, if I am to read your article, then it is because I want my problems to be solved. In your article, you are explaining the situation that a person has to go through in the stages of their depression. Well, it is good to explain the same, but the full article shouldn't be of that alone. People want a solution to their problem, which is a major missing in your article. And this is what I meant by 'a piece of in-depth information' in my previous comment.
            I would suggest you take some other topic and write about that as this is a hard topic to give the exact answer.
            Also, I would recommend you to check this out. https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … y-of-a-Hub
            Regards

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               Hena Ghoshposted 5 years agoin reply to this

               @Mom-Blogs  Thank you so much for mentioning and make me understand what is the major issue with this article. Yes, you are right, it is indeed a sensitive topic to write all in a detailed manner. And If I am not a professional or an Authorised writer to explain the roots then it better to write some other good kinds of stuff.
               
               I am pretty sure there is a lot to learn here and I will take small steps at a time.
               I will read the link too that you have shared.
               
               Thanks once again for guiding me and you have a wonderful day

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   This is a difficult topic to tackle here. Dealing with mental health issues is a matter for professionals and HubPages is reluctant to publish such articles unless authored by people with appropriate credentials.
   
   There are several grammar issues and a lot of inappropriate capitalizations, such as here:
   
   "No D(d)octor, teacher, preacher or C(c)ounsellor can tell you what is good and right for you. It's you. The V(v)oice inside you will always whisper to you if you look for your answers. The process of S(s)elf-healing starts with self-guidance and self-love."
   
   That sentence also suggests that people suffering from depression don't need professional help; they just have to pull themselves together. That's dangerous advice.
   
   Your article reads more like a personal experience blog and HubPages is not a blogging platform.
   
   Sorry, if this is a bit harsh, but it's important to understand what HubPages is. The Learning Center here https://hubpageshelp.com/ offers a lot of help.

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      Hena Ghoshposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      @Rupert Taylor  Thank you for taking the time to read my article and point out the mistakes that happened. As I am a new user, every bit of guidance and advises will be helpful for me. I will keep that in mind not to repeat these mistakes in the future and thanks for clarifying that Hubpages is not a blogging platform.
      
      I will edit or if necessary will delete this content of this post.
      
      Thanks once again and You have a good day

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