I'd like feedback on my article: My Long Lost Friend

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   ARUN KANTIposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: My Long Lost Friend

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      RoadMonkeyposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Your hub is interesting and well written. Yet it seems a bit unfinished and leaves me with a number of questions however.
      
      I understand that you have not seen him for forty years but I wonder why now? Why do you have this sudden urge to find him? A capsule on your motivation would be useful, I think.
      
      Another thing, you mentioned searching for him on social media sites. For anyone who has ever tried to find someone, knowing which sites to try and how to go about it could be very useful. Maybe you could add a capsule about your search methods.
      
      Your hub is a story without an end, as yet, so I think you need to provide some "satisfaction" for the reader, maybe with showing how you are getting nearer or if not, what you plan to do next to find him.
      
      Hope this helps.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   You've shared an interesting story. The article contains a few English errors and the photo should be larger, but I think the main problem is the Amazon capsules. All of them should be removed. Though the item in each capsule is related to a concept in your article, that's not good enough. When we use an Amazon capsule, the article must be about the item in the capsule or the item must be essential for a project that we are describing. In addition, we need to describe the features, benefits, and disadvantages of the item in the capsule.

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   ARUN KANTIposted 5 years ago

   Thank you for your wise advice.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   I saw a punctuation error where the period is at the beginning of the sentence. There might be more errors, so I would proof read your article carefully.

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   ARUN KANTIposted 5 years ago

   Thank you.

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   Michael-Duncanposted 5 years ago

   In addition to the corrections already mentioned, try creating variety between the text capsules by adding a callout, a video (e.g. about friendship from video sharing sites), images (from free photo sharing sites). You could also include a quiz or a poll. Also, bear in mind that most readers of HP articles are mobile device users. Therefore the paragraphs, as well as the entire structure of the article, needs to be mobile-friendly in terms of spacing and size. Season's greetings to you and all the best!

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   ARUN KANTIposted 5 years ago

   Thank you very much for your good advice.

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