I'd like feedback on my article: Understand My Picnic Tour

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   sanjay kumar1985posted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Understand My Picnic Tour (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      "There is a famous English saying - 'All work and no play, Max Jack a Dal Boy',"
      
      That's not English. Did you type it on your phone?
      
      Just for reference, its, "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy."
      
      Are you using translation software? Because some of your sentences make no sense at all, "We were very happy to reach the lap of nature. We spread the cracks under the shade of trees." I dread to think what 'spreading the cracks' refers to
      
      There are too many English 'misunderstandings' here. It means that you may not yet have the skills necessary to write at HubPages. Take some time to improve your English, then come back and try again.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   I think the main problem is that your article focuses on your experience and seems to be a blog post. HubPages isn’t a blogging site. Though you have written a little about the benefits of relaxation, most of the article is about your personal experiences on the picnic. I think you would need to make the article longer and change its nature and title in order for it be featured.
   
   Your also need to go through the article and correct the English errors. The “All work and no play” quotation is wrong, for example. Another error is that you say that you prepared tea and berger. Did you mean that you prepared burgers?
   
   It would probably be helpful if you visited the Learning Center of HubPages in order to discover how to add multiple text capsules and photo capsules to an article (if you don't already know how to do this). The article should have more than a single text capsule. The Learning Center can be found at https://hubpageshelp.com/.

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   Rupert Taylorposted 5 years ago

   I'll ask a question frequently asked here but never answered, "Where did you find out about HubPages?

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   sanjay kumar1985posted 5 years ago

   Hello sir,
   I heard about the hub page on the Internet. In my àrtical, I saw some mistake word. I will try to improve it.

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      theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      We know you found HubPages on the internet, but where? What website is promoting it?
      
      Did it tell you it's possible to make money here? Because it's almost impossible unless you have perfect English.

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