I'd like feedback on my article: Weight Loss Benefits for Men and Women {2020}

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   sikandar iqbalposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Weight Loss Benefits for Men and Women {2020} (must be signed in to view)

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   Kamkar sanjuktaposted 5 years ago

   I think your title doesn't match to your article.
   "Weight Loss Benefits for Men and Women {2020}"- but you only discussed about women I guess and it's more how to lose weight than what are the benefits.

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   sikandar iqbalposted 5 years ago

   yes sir really i will do my best.

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   What are your medical/professional qualifications for giving such advice? For example, it's now accepted that carbohydrates are more responsible for obesity than fat.
   
   Mentioning hoodia is probably not a good idea as it may flag the 'unsuitable content' filters.
   
   You need to be aware that weight loss is one of the most overdone topics on the internet. People look to experts for advice. Your article has to compete with millions of others on the topic. My advice is to find other things to write about - subjects that you have expertise in.

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      sikandar iqbalposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      really sorry mam I m a registered nurse ok I find the other things to find

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         theraggededgeposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         No need to apologise to me You're a nurse? Well, that's good. You should mention it in your article bio.

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   sikandar iqbalposted 5 years ago

   ok mam thanks.

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   Doneta Wrateposted 5 years ago

   bout coronavirus, rush says that sweden has never shut down like we have a and a lot of the world.  Yet sweden has has a 1000 fewer deaths than michigan does.  michigan and sweden are roughly the same size and population.

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   One of your images is watermarked and is a copyright infringement, so it should be replaced. All of the images should have a suitable source and license.
   
   I think you should give more details about the four diets that you mention. It sounds like you are recommending them, so you should give information about their benefits and drawbacks. You should also add authoritative references about them.
   
   As theraggededge says, you should add the fact that you are a registered nurse to your bio.  This fact should also be added to the "About" section of your profile. I think it's still necessary to add references to the article, however.
   
   Your "About" section should be about you. It shouldn't consist of information copied from the Internet.
   
   It would be a good idea to proofread the article to catch the language errors.

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   sikandar iqbalposted 5 years ago

   dear i must improve my self and very thankful to you

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