I'd like feedback on my article: One Bowl Diet Plan For Weight Loss

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  1. Samir Tale profile image45
    Samir Taleposted 7 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article One Bowl Diet Plan For Weight Loss (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. Bede le Venerable profile image99
    Bede le Venerableposted 7 months ago

    Samir, this sounds like an intriguing concept. There is potential here for a good article, but there are a number of awkward phrases. Here are just a few:

    “Most of the people don’t know when to stop eating. There is no such indicator of our body which shows when we should stop eating as we have consumed enough then what is the need.” This may sound better like this:

    -Most people don’t know when to stop eating as the body has no indicator. We eat to fulfill our bodily needs.

    “Start with first thing. Get a bowl which is slightly less than your daily food intake at a particular time (Lunch or Dinner).” This may sound better like this:

    -Let’s start with the first thing: get a bowl! It should be slightly less in size than what you normally require for lunch or dinner.

    “It is only interested in some energy which will keep it going which it gets by breaking any food.” This may sound better like this:

    -The body is mainly interested in energy, which most foods provide.

    My main advice is to have someone proof read your article smooth out some other phrases.

    Also, you may consider adding more images, as from Pixabay.

  3. Gregory DeVictor profile image96
    Gregory DeVictorposted 7 months ago

    Samir, you need to do some work with your title and subtitles.

    According to the HubPages Style Guide and Helpful Writing Tips:

    “Proper Use of Capitalization in Titles and Subtitles

    Readers will get an idea of whether they can trust or distrust your content in the first few seconds of looking at your page. Proper capitalization in your title and subtitles is an indicator of your Hub's credibility. We recommend using standard title case when formatting your titles and subtitles and using the APA guidelines (or another comparable publication) for guidance. Here are a couple specific guidelines for capitalizing your titles and subtitles:

    Always capitalize the first word of a title or subtitle.

    Capitalize all “major” words (nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs, and pronouns) in your title, including the second part of hyphenated major words (e.g., High-Quality not High-quality).

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  4. Gregory DeVictor profile image96
    Gregory DeVictorposted 7 months ago

    This is a continuation of my comment above.

    Your title should read “One Bowl Diet Plan for Weight Loss.” The word “for” does not need to be capitalized.

    You wrote:

    “One Bowl Diet Plan - Weight loss in a fast and efficient manner”

    In accordance with HubPages’ Style Guide and Helpful Writing Tips, your subtitle should read:

    One Bowl Diet Plan - Weight Loss in a Fast and Efficient Manner

    Hope this helps.

  5. Gregory DeVictor profile image96
    Gregory DeVictorposted 7 months ago

    One final comment: Your article is too short and should be a minimum of 1,000 words. Therefore, you need to add more useful and pertinent content that is valuable for your readers. Just make sure that the additional content is not “filler material” because the HP editors won’t buy it.

  6. Pacesetter Abbey profile image49
    Pacesetter Abbeyposted 7 months ago

    The "one bowl diet plan" has the potential to be quite effective, it seems like a regimen for losing excess body fat, which I find quite interesting. Unfortunately, you did not give specifics regarding the following: the size of the bowl, the best/healthy meals to consume, and what time of the day it'd be best to follow the plan. All these and more would make your article voluminous and appealing to read.

    Grammatically, you seem to be struggling with punctuations, spellings, sentence structure, verbs, etc. The secret to increasing your audience is good writing. If your ideas are ingenious but your means of relaying those ideas are poorly constructed, people will react to it negatively. Nevertheless, your writing should improve with time if you spend more time reading qualitative articles and books.

    Finally, your title is a bit ambiguous and your subheadings are not correctly formatted. "One Bowl Diet Plan - Weight loss in a fast and efficient manner" could be rephrased as "One Bowl Diet Plan for Weight Loss," or more descriptively "Lose Weight with the One Bowl Diet Plan." Good titles are simple, straightforward, and specific. Unnecessary additions would make readers uninterested in your article. Regarding your subheadings, they do not follow the same format, some were underlined others weren't. It might be inconsequential, but little details like that shows how good of a writer you are.

    Keep writing, you are steps away from being the writer you dream of becoming.

    1. Samir Tale profile image45
      Samir Taleposted 7 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks,
      I shall look into your suggestions.

 
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