I'd like feedback on my article: KEEPING CHILDREN BUSY DURING THE COVID 19...

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   Millicent Akinyi Okelloposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: KEEPING CHILDREN BUSY DURING THE COVID 19 BREAK.

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      mroconnellposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Good job, Millicent. I think that you have several great ideas in there that I've heard from my work peers with kids at home (and other really original ones too).
      
      I have three ideas you can consider, but your hub is already great the way it is now.
      
      1. It would be really cool to separate your ideas out by age range, or to add more complexity to some of the ideas for older age ranges. As you know, there's a big difference between a 4 year and an 8 year old!
      
      2. Your post is really 5 great ideas. It might make sense to put that in your title "5 Ways To Keep Children Busy During the COVID 19 Break" or something along those lines
      
      3. The photos look like really professional baking, rather than kids baking. If you have authentic pictures of food baked by kids, it might be more meaningful and show that you're really doing these things with the kids. For example, photos of the little dolls the kids are hunting or something like that could make the post really adorable. It will break up the text in the post to make it easier to read. And it might increase the odds that people will share the photos on pinterest and other channels.

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         Millicent Akinyi Okelloposted 5 years agoin reply to this

         Hi mroconnell. Thank you very much for that beautiful assistance.  I will check on the article as recommended especially the age difference.

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            mroconnellposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            It's my pleasure!

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   Hi. Here are some suggestions.
   
   The title shouldn't be written entirely in capital letters. There shouldn't be a period (full stop) after the title and subtitles. I don't think it's necessary to italicize the subtitles when you've already put them in bold print. You should reconsider whether you need to use bold print beyond the subtitles.
   
   Your should proofread the article to catch a few errors. There should be a space after the number in a subtitle, for example. Another example is that you say children are "found" of watching TV. There are a few more mistakes that need to be corrected.
   
   The article is quite short. It would be good if it was at least 750 words long.
   
   Another thing to note is that your bio cuts off in the middle of a sentence.

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      Millicent Akinyi Okelloposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Hi AliciaC .I appreciate your help so much. It takes your help to help me see what I should do. Thanks a lot

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