I'd like feedback on my article: Famous Scientist, Waldemar Haffkine, and...

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   Nikolas Turustusposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Famous Scientist, Waldemar Haffkine, and Modern Pandemics (must be signed in to view)

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, your story is both an article and a letter.       It is hard to understand as Allicia described. Write ony one one topic.

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Hi, Nikolas. I see that you've already edited the article since I first looked at it, but more changes are needed. The watermarked first and last image need to be replaced with images that have a suitable license. The Amazon capsule should be removed because you don't describe your experience with the item or mention why it's related to the article. The subtitle of the last text capsule is too long and is incomplete.
   
   The article contains some puzzling aspects and is hard to understand in some places. Who are the "Dear Sirs" that you are addressing? Females will read your article as well as males. You don't explain what Limfa Haffkina is. In addition, you jump between different topics. You start with languages, move to cholera, and originally jumped to a third topic, which you seem to have removed. There's now a big space in the article where that topic used to be.
   
   You need to go through the article to correct the English errors and to make the information easier to understand. You should choose one theme for your article and stick to it.

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      Nikolas Turustusposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, Alicia! Could you explain me, do I write a short summary to the proposed book in Amazon capsula? Yours

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         AliciaCposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         A summary or brief description in an Amazon capsule is good, but it may not be enough. Your article must be about the item in the Amazon capsule or the item in the capsule must be essential for the reader to create a project that you've described. If you want to sell a book, you should have already reviewed it in the article.

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            Nikolas Turustusposted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Oh! There is a difference between the review and the summary. From your experience, how many words? Yours

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               AliciaCposted 4 years agoin reply to this

               Nikolas, you're approaching this topic in the wrong way. Your goal should be to create an informative or helpful article for readers, not to create the minimum number of words required to sell an Amazon product. You are focusing on how to sell an Amazon product, which is unlikely to be successful.
               
               Let me give you an example. I've been thinking about creating an article about a particular book that I've enjoyed for a long time. If I do this, I will first create an informative review of the book, perhaps adding facts about the writer and the film based on the book where relevant. My goal will be for the article to be useful without the presence of any Amazon product. Since the book is an older one and may not be available in some bookstores, I will probably add an Amazon link to it once I've finished the article.
               
               Some people don't use an Amazon capsule to sell a product. They use an Amazon link for the product instead, which you can obtain via the text capsule. You need to highlight the name of the item that you want to sell in your article, click on the chain link tool in the text capsule, and then click on the Amazon tab to find the item. If you do this, you don't need to add information to an Amazon capsule.

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