I'd like feedback on my article: Being a Mother is not easy: Learn to create a..

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   Jyoti kanojiaposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Being a Mother is not easy: Learn to create a better world for your child (must be signed in to view)

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      Niks007posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      All in all, a good article. But the overall structure needs to be fixed. Capsules need to be added. If you can write more about the topic it will be great. A long-form but "to the point" article has greater chances to succeed. I liked your article. You can consider making these modifications though.

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         Jyoti kanojiaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks. I will incorporate the changes you have mentioned.

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      Abby Slutskyposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi,
      Here are some ideas for you.
      
      1. The title is not APA formatting.
      2. I would also do subtitles in APA formatting with paragraphs underneath. Use capitalizemytitle.com if you don't know how to do it yourself.
      3. There are not at least two pictures.
      4. I am not sure if this is 750 words or more as I did not count it.
      5. You need to use a grammar check tool as there are some errors.
      Overall, the ideas are good though.
      Abby

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   bhattucposted 4 years ago

   Jyoti, you have selected a good topic but it needs some more content in a structured way. You can showcase some quotes in boxes in between the article capsules. You might give some videos related to what you want to convey. I can suggest these few things.
   Incidentally I am also on a learning path.

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      Jyoti kanojiaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for your feedback

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   GwennyOhposted 4 years ago

   Hi Jyoti;
   
   The very first thing I see as I read the first header, is a conflict. 'Being a mother is not easy,' which suggests that it's an editorial piece on the hardship of motherhood, then you next suggest that the article is about 'learning to create a better world for your child.'
   
   You have been offered great advice already, but for me this kind of conflict of outline of what I am about to read, is off-putting. Am I going to read about a mother who is having a hard time parenting and her cautions to other mothers, or will I be reading about how to better parent my child? or, and this is a head-scratcher moment for me, am I about to read an article about a mother who is having trouble parenting, that wants to tell me how to parent better.
   
   No offense, just how I see it. Also, there are numerous grammatical errors, but fluidity in grammar takes time and practice. Good luck.

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      Jyoti kanojiaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      The heading is the crucial part of the article, and I know I am not good at it.
      
      Thanks for helping me to see it differently.

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         GwennyOhposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         You will be good at it though, but learning what to watch for is key. If you feel like you have a lot to learn, keeping a journal with insights that are helpful to you in your writing, may help.

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