I would like to feedback on my article: How to Cook Sisig

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   Eric Cauncaposted 4 years ago

   I would like to feedback on my article: How to Cook Sisig - New York Times Most Delicious Pork Dish on Earth. Thank you.
   
   http://hub.me/anxSS

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      It's featured, isn't it? If it's featured and you have no problems with it, then asking for feedback could be seen as promotional. However, if you try to get it moved to Delishably, and it's turned down, that's the time to ask for help.

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         Eric Cauncaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Yes, it is featured, this article is actually my second article. However, I changed it. It was originally 3 recipes, I deleted the other two. The contents were just ingredients and procedures, and I used illegal photos. I've studied the articles on Delishibly how authors pass the standard of the Sites. I copied the layout, I add the supplement ratings, etc. I post it on forum because I cannot resend it to be checked by editors, so the hubbers could check it for me. I will thank everyone who will feedback on this article.

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      GwennyOhposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Punctuation in Title is faulty, should be "How to Cook Sisig - The New York Times' Most Delicious Pork Dish on Earth"
      
      Advice: reword your mini bio. It says "Eric is a Filipino and loves to eat. He has already cooked Filipino foods since he was young." Consider something like-- "Hailing from the Philippines, Eric is a true foodie and has enjoyed cooking from an early age."
      
      I admit I am choosy about wording, but the way you wrote it comes across as unnecessary use of nationality, and also your picture makes it seem you are young (maybe a different pic if you are older?), so to reword it seems wise.
      
      You say: "The term was originally used to describe sour fruits and vegetables that dress in vinegar, garlic, pepper, and salt that are usually eaten by pregnant women, but later it evolved to pork. During the American time, Americans hadn't eaten and use the head and internal organs of the pigs, so they had given it to the local for free. Filipinos are a resourceful bunch so nothing is wasted. They chopped it, mixed with onion, fried, and served on a hot plate and this food was born."
      
      The tenses are a off in yours and in some places grammar is wrong. How I'd write it:
      
      "The term was originally used to describe sour fruits and vegetables dressed in vinegar, garlic, pepper, and salt, usually eaten by pregnant women. Later on the fruit was replaced with pork. During the American occupation, Americans didn't consume the head and internal organs of the pigs, so they gave them to the locals. Filipinos are a resourceful bunch so nothing was wasted. The pork was chopped, mixed with onion, fried, then served on a hotplate. This is how Sisig was born."
      
      I don't have time to offer more grammatical tips, but I hope this helps.

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         Eric Cauncaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you. GwennOh, I will do your advice.

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   GwennyOhposted 4 years ago

   I should say, your description of sisig makes me hungry! One day I hope to make some.

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