I'd like feedback on my article: Romantic songs

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   Syeda Mahaposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Romantic songs

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Syeda,
      
      The title needs to be more eye-catching. Also your favourite songs aren't going to be everyone's favourite songs.
      
      Your example of from (Elton John) to (Britney Spears) is way too narrow. Popular music didn't start with Elton, and Britney isn't exactly current. Her last single and album were released in 2016.
      
      Break the large blocks of text into shorter paragraphs.
      
      Add the artists' names to the titles. And the year of publication. Also you need to say why it deserves its place in the list. A list is boring unless you can expand on the components.
      
      Check for mistakes. It's Justin Bieber, not Briber.
      
      Choose just a few videos to include and ditch the rest.. The page is taking a long time to load, even with superfast broadband and a fast laptop. Also the videos should be spread through the article and not lumped together at the bottom.
      
      Be careful of treating your readers as though they have just been born. If they have clicked on a list of romantic songs, they are highly likely to know what the different genres are. And in any case, other genres are irrelevant - you are only writing about romantic songs.
      
      The essay on music doesn't belong in the article. Use it as the basis of another hub. Everything in the article MUST be connected to the topic of romantic songs.
      
      Why have you got a table on food groups?
      
      The URL is wrong - it says 50 romantic poerties. 'Poerties' is not an English word. And never include a fixed number in the URL - just in case you change the list.
      
      Here's a similar article on the network site - you have to make yours better than that one. https://spinditty.com/artists-bands/Fav … -the-2010s
      
      And here's one specifically dedicated to romantic songs: https://spinditty.com/playlists/40-Grea … es-Day-Mix (too many videos, I think, but a good example for you to emulate).
      
      There's a lot of work to be done to fix yours up, but if you want to become successful on HubPages, it's a good learning experience.

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   You need to rewrite your article because it contains many problems. I've listed some of them below.
   There's a spelling error in the URL.
   The title should be longer than two words.
   The first section of the article is present on another site.
   There are a large number of videos in the article, which makes it slow to load.
   The essays about music for kids are present on another site and are unrelated to the theme of romantic songs.
   A table about food has nothing to do with the theme of your article, and neither does a vote about heart valves.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   Syeda, I just looked at one of your other articles, 'The Flower and Its Value'. I noticed that the writing style is very different from your own. I pasted a section into Google and it seems you have copied from Britannica.com. You need to know that taking material and pretending you wrote it is stealing, or plagiarism. Never, ever do it.
   
   Again you have an unrelated table at the end.

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   Syeda Mahaposted 4 years ago

   I'm sorry and I agree that I copied in that that article just because I want to see that what is the difference in my writing way and others??
   Now I realize my fault and I try to not copy form another side and write my own...thanks for realizing me

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Delete all copied text. Even if you have to unpublish the article.

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