Editing of article

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   Moondot1822posted 14 months ago

   I want to ask for advice regarding my article that I have submitted to owlcation. They didn't reject it but said to wait for editing. What kind of editing they want? What is wrong with my article? Please, seniors, help me in this regard. So I can overcome these mistakes in other articles.
   Here is the link to my article:
   http://hub.me/anJoz
   Blessings to all.

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      tsmogposted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Curios doesn't that mean they are going to edit it? I dun'no . . .

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      theraggededgeposted 14 months agoin reply to this

      If you've submitted it, you need to wait until it is accepted or rejected. If small edits are necessary, the editors will make them. If it needs more work done by you, they will tell you.
      
      Taking a quick look - I would delete those first two sentences for a start. There can hardly be anyone (who uses the internet) who doesn't know that an elephant is an animal.
      
      If possible, reduce the number of times you use the word 'elephant' - currently it appears 72 times.
      
      Good luck.

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         Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

         Thank you so much, Bev G. I will reduce the number of word 'elephant'. Blessings to you.

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   Eric Cauncaposted 14 months ago

   Which species is taller African elephant or forest elephant? What are their sizes? Note: pounds (lbs.) is not size it's a unit for weight. Put Latin name for other species of elephants.
   
   Delete the entire paragraph about the white elephant.
   The white elephant is not a species of elephant, they are albino. Albinism is not a characteristic of elephants and it occurs in many animals. For about Burma, it should be in the different subtitle as an "elephant in human culture.
   
   "Elephants are big, four-legged mammal" is better than the first two sentences. For physical features, for me, I'll make it into one paragraph only, instead of separating it into different subtitles.
   
   Additional info for behavior like feeding, defense, courtship, gestation, migration (white elephant leadership should be in behavior)
   Add more facts that everyone doesn't know to make it interesting. Thank you.

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks for your advice, Aric. You have guided me in great detail. I will work on it.
      Blessings...

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   Rupert Taylorposted 14 months ago

   Elephants are the world's largest *land* mammals. Blue whales are the world's largest mammals. That's the sort of fundamental error that destroys your credibility. A reader might think if you can't get that right why should I read on.

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks, Rupert, for your precious time. I will improve myself.
      Blessings...

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks for pointing out. I don't know how I made this big blunder because it's a very commen thing that elephants are largest terrestrial animals.

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   Misbah786posted 14 months ago

   Moondot, I am not sure but can you please tell me whether the team asked you to edit or they just simply asked to wait until they edit it?
   Because I have heard if the article, which you want to move to the network site, has just some minor issues or mistakes, the team can snip it and there is nothing to do at your end
   
   I think BevG can tell you better in detail
   Blessings

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Yeah, Misbah, they said to wait until they edit it. But I think, Eric is right, it will take a long time. That's why I have asked for help in editing.

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         Misbah786posted 14 months agoin reply to this

         @Moondot, I really don't have any idea
         I have a lot of my articles on Letterpile, but HP auto-moved them
         I submitted one of my articles to a network site yesterday, let's see what happens

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            Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

            Yes, I have seen your articles. You have done a great job. I love the way you articulate your feelings. I was busy with CSS exams so couldn't give much time to HP. I gave it (CSS) a shot. Let's see what happened.

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               Misbah786posted 14 months agoin reply to this

               May Allah gives you success on every path of life, Ameen!
               My kind prayers and well wishes are with you

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                  Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

                  Thank you so much for your kind words, Misbah. I am blessed to have a friend like you.

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   Eric Cauncaposted 14 months ago

   
   
   Other authors say, from the old post on the forum. When an article has been queued to edit, it takes not just months but years.

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      Misbah786posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      OMG, it can take years
      I mean, Seriously?

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   AliciaCposted 14 months ago

   Hi, Moondot. One thing that I noticed was that you haven’t written the scientific names of the elephants correctly. This doesn’t look good when you say that you studied botany and zoology as major subjects. The genus and species should be written in italics. Only the genus is capitalized.
   
   In addition, the section about the species of elephants doesn’t make sense. You say that only two species of elephants exist, but you’ve given the names of three species.
   
   Good luck with editing your article and getting it moved to a network site.

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Alicia, thank you so much for your time. I will try to overcome my mistakes in my new articles. Blessings to you.

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   Millicent Akinyi Okelloposted 14 months ago

   Hello there. You don't need to submit your article to the website before the editors go through it and accept it. If it has some minor corrections, then you have to leave it all to them. Good luck.

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      Moondot1822posted 14 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you for your time, Millicent. Yes, I am also thinking about to leave the article to them for editing. As I have mentioned before that they didn't reject my article.

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