I'd Need Feedback on my Article

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  1. Okyere koranteng profile image78
    Okyere korantengposted 5 months ago

    I'd need feedback on my article, "The Simpsons' 17 Most Dangerous Predictions for 2024". Here's the link:
    https://discover.hubpages.com/entertain … -is-insane

    1. theraggededge profile image86
      theraggededgeposted 5 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      It's a fun article but I see a few issues. Mostly sentence structure and grammar.

      The Simpsons is not just broadcast in the US. It's worldwide so, for example, it's also one of the longest-animated series in the UK.

      "But, does The Simpsons' even predict the future?"

      Delete the comma and the apostrophe. It's just a plural.

      "You would have to read this to find out…" Should be "You need to read this to find out...".

      "On Tuesday, November 15, 2022, the former president of the United States, Donald Trump, arguably one of the most controversial the country has ever seen, depending on whose side you're on."

      You didn't complete the sentence. What did he do on that date? You need to incorporate the next paragraph to make it grammatically correct. You also don't need the last clause 'depending on whose side you're on'.

      There are a lot of similar errors throughout. The best thing would be to paste your text into the free Hemingway app. It's really good for picking up issues with grammar and style.

      You might have trouble with those links as they lead to commercial companies. It may be ok, but it's possible the editors will snip them.

      The image credits look a bit dodgy too. Are they licensed for republishing? You have simply added the source as text instead of linking back. I searched and it seems 'Technowthen' is your Medium account. That isn't a legal image attribution. Read this article in the Learning Center: https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use

      Hope that helps.

      Good luck.

  2. Okyere koranteng profile image78
    Okyere korantengposted 5 months ago

    Thank you so much for your constructive feedback!

    However, those images are actually mine. I guess I would only have to upload them to image submission sites and then link them. I'm taking a look at the image attribution page.

    Your suggestion to use the Hemingway app for grammar and style checks is fantastic, and I'll definitely utilize it for this article and in future writings too.

    Again, I deeply appreciate your feedback and the time you took to help me improve my work. I'm looking forward to applying your advice and making the article better.

    Thanks!

    1. Kenna McHugh profile image91
      Kenna McHughposted 5 months agoin reply to this

      When I use my own images, I put my name in the "source" field of the photo capsule.

  3. theraggededge profile image86
    theraggededgeposted 5 months ago

    You are welcome smile

    1. Okyere koranteng profile image78
      Okyere korantengposted 5 months agoin reply to this

      It's my pleasure

  4. theraggededge profile image86
    theraggededgeposted 5 months ago

    Just wondering how they can be your own images? They clearly show the Simpsons and Trump. Editing such images doesn't grant you automatic ownership. The originals would need to have licenses which allowed editing. In other words, a Creative Commons license:

    https://creativecommons.org/share-your-work/cclicenses/

    Reusing images is a minefield. You have to be sure.

 
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