MY hubs sound like a history lesson

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   Dianemaeposted 13 years ago

   I have written several hubs on travel.  I look for something different and unique about the town and try to educate my readers with a little, "I didn't know that."  But as I go back and reread the hubs they sound too much like telling a history lesson.  Any suggestions on how to make them more appealing.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Wellfleet-Home- … k-in-WORLD
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Onset-Massachus … dy-Beaches
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Beating-Dru … ode-Island
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Nostalgia-Trip-on-a-Carousel

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      Green Van Linesposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      You should write in a simple manner what you want to say. That would resolve your problem.

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         Dianemaeposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you. I will work on that.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 13 years ago

   I think you need to personalize them.  Have you travelled to these places?  Devote some time to painting a picture of the area - what you liked about it, what you didn't, as well as giving the dry facts.  Your Hubs are a bit short for a travel Hub - a longer Hub gives you more space to give your personal impressions as well as the historical facts

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      Dianemaeposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much.  I have traveled to all the places and took the pictures.  I will put more personal opinion and views into the next one.

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   Lisa HWposted 13 years ago

   I'm not necessarily disagreeing with Marissa about adding something more personal, but I don't really think your Hubs seem like a history lesson either.  They're nice.  They did strike me as little on the brief side for travel Hubs, though.    One of my favorite kinds of Hubs are those with pictures people have taken of places themselves.  Looking forward to more (particularly because I'm from Massachusetts, I guess). 

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      Dianemaeposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you. I'm going to try to make them a bit longer and maybe add without teaching.

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   Randy Godwinposted 13 years ago

   I always like to use my imagination a bit when beginning a historical location hub, Diane.  Not always, but some places seem to call for it.  Here is one in which I used just such an opening.  But then again, some may not like this type of a beginning. It's a shot in the dark! 
   
   Apparently this worked for me because a member of the restoration company contacted me after reading my article and invited me back for a special tour of the newly restored plantation house. 
   
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Fort-George-Isl … Plantation

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      Lissieposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Well your Wellfleet home hub at my post hated tautology "most unique" - but to me it was far too short-  it was just getting started and then it was over!
      
      Put your own opinions in - be there - did you hate the hotel, laugh a the local "rush hour" of 10 minutes - eat at a really good bad/restaraunt, see something funny,sad, unusual?

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         Dianemaeposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         I never thought of doing my articles as a travel log.  I was just throwing info out and letting my readers take it from there, but you are right I should add more about the area and my views.  I arrive at my locations by sailboat and usually eat aboard, but I'm sure I can find something to write about.  Thanks again.

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      Dianemaeposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Randy--I read your hub and you are correct. I will use your approach next hub.  Hope you read it and let me know what you think.

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