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   saleheensblogposted 13 years ago

   I have written 6 amazon hubs to date. Please check the following two and tell me how did I do and how can I do better. I didn't leave places for adsense ads as I don't have that yet.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Best-DryGuy-Wid … eap-Online
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Buy-SS-Willow-C … -All-Sizes
   
   Thanks in advance. I will check your replies tomorrow. Keep hubbing.
   
   Best Regards.

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      Darrke Thoughtsposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      The initial text is hard to read because there is so much in that one very long paragraph.  (I think it looks even longer than it is because of the half-page format).  Break it up a little more and it will be easier to read.
      
      I'll be coming back to see what other advice you get about these amazon hubs.  Sounds like a tough challenge to write something so geared towards sales.

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         saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for the suggestion. I will think about it.

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   lrohnerposted 13 years ago

   Salesheen - You're venturing in front of a new audience -- shoppers. They are a very different group than those who are out looking for information or entertainment. Shoppers have a short attention span and, since they're about to spend their hard-earned money, they want to be spoon fed and don't want to work for information.
   
   I think the best thing you can do for product hubs at the outset is to have someone read it over for grammar, punctuation and vocabulary. I get the overall gist of what you're trying to say in your hubs, but I really don't think that's enough to be successful selling products.
   
   I hope you prove me wrong.

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      saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Got it, the hub was written in real hurry. I will do some editing for that. Thank you.

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   Tilecleaninghubposted 13 years ago

   Your title way too long and in the 1/2 second it takes to either read it and understand or hit back I just choose to hit back.  As others have said people want to be easily spoon fed, to the point and dont make reader actually have to think to read your hub.

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      saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      I am trying some big titles for sales hubs. Just an experiment. Lets see what I can get out of it. Your suggestion is highly appropriated. I will keep it in my mind

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   Nelle Hoxieposted 13 years ago

   The general format with blue to the right is very good. I bet a fair number of people won't even bother to read the text - which in a product hub is more than okay. I like it when they see what they want and click away.
   
   Your title should be a bit shorter. But I say go with it and see how it does. I bet you make some sales. Write more of these hubs - say 50 or so. And see if you can get some sales. If nothing happens after 2 or 3 months, you'll need to try again.
   
   But I say good job.

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      saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks I will try to write 1 hub everyday for next few months. Lets see what happens. I hope I will get some sales as I m getting regular clicks.

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      Lisa HWposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      I say "good job"  too (even though I'm not the best one to have an opinion on general format, so my "good job" is on how thorough and complete the information is, as well as the overall look of the Hubs and the impression they create.
      
      saleheensblog, I noticed just a few very minor grammar errors (so minor they might be mistaken for typos).   (I know English isn't your first language, so writing that well in English is, as far as I'm concerned, pretty impressive.  I couldn't write a shopping list in a second language.  I just wonder, though, if you may have a grammar-check program you might want to run on the text - mostly only because the errors are so minor they do look like typing errors the author didn't catch.   I wouldn't even mention the minor errors at all, but you asked for feedback; so I thought I'd be candid (even if the "issue" is very, very, minor).   

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         saleheensblogposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks for letting me know. I will check and try to weep out the errors. So far punctuation has been the greatest problem for me. Sometimes I get very confused. I will read some grammar books to learn it properly.
         
         Thank you for your time and care

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   skyfireposted 13 years ago

   Pick the niche in which you can write comfortably. Don't jump onto niche where you have to research a lot initially. Build up some confidence by writing about things you like then jump to bigger niche to compete with others. Whenever my mind acts like lost puppy at 3:00 am for product reviews i go back to basics to read hubs by Susana, Nelle, Michelle and Katinka.

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