I'd like feedback on my Hub: Why friendzone exist ?

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   ravinrauposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   I really want to be a hubber. Please give me an example of my mistake and help me to improve them.
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Why friendzone exist ? (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      NatashaLposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      First, welcome to HubPages. 
      
      I've looked at your Hub, and would like to point out some concerns I noticed.  They all can be corrected, but I think this Hub needs a lot of TLC.
      
      *  I recommend that you ask a native English speaker to proofread your Hub before you publish it.  There are many errors in grammar and usage that make the Hub difficult to read.  You can cut and paste this Hub into Microsoft Word or WPS Write and use the grammar checker.  I found several results when I searched for "online grammar checker" on Bing.  I suspect that the grammar is the main reason you didn't pass the QAP.
      
      *  To me, this Hub doesn't answer the question posed in the title:  'Why does the friend zone exist?"  Rather, it seems to be answering the questions "How do I know if I'm in the friend zone?" or "How do I get out of the friend zone?"
      
      *  As FFC pointed out, your Hub has nothing to do with "criticism of new religious movements." 
      
      *  Do you have permission to use your images?  Using images without permission is against HubPages policy and is illegal in many countries.  (The Super Mario Bros. image especially comes to mind, since Nintendo probably didn't give you permission to use Mario.)
      
      *   I'm not sure how tasteful the Urban Dictionary image is in a Hub meant for a serious discussion.  Memes also don't really belong in most Hubs.
      
      *  Why do we need two videos showing how to get out of the friend zone, especially when you advise readers that nothing is wrong with the friend zone?  If you want to include a video, find one good video that more neutrally explains the friend zone.
      
      *  The train metaphor would have been more effective if it had been used throughout the Hub.  Putting it so far into the Hub makes it trite and lessens the effectiveness.
      
      *  You make general statements but don't expand on them.  How, for example, will someone "go on to have a better and exciting life" after changing his/her mind about the friend zone?
      
      *  You list ways that someone can tell when he/she is in the friend zone.  Item #10 is..."You are totally in the friend zone." 
      
      *  Considering how popular the term friend zone seems to be lately, you should be able to find reputable, authoritative sources to support your statements.  Citing those sources would add credibility to this Hub.
      
      I hope this helps.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 9 years ago

   My first question would be: why was the Hub posted under the "Religion and Philosophy" heading, when it has nothing to do with either of those things?

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      ravinrauposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      I randomly put that. I just notice it. Thanks for telling that to me. Could you suggest me in which topic should I but this article in ? Furthermore is there any other correction which I need to do ?

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   BumblelyBeeposted 9 years ago

   Ok for starters, for many of your points if your getting say called by your last name and avoided then your probably not in "the friend zone" because that's more what someone who wants to avoid you all together would do. Also trying to make yourself a best friend before trying to date someone probably isn't that great an idea because then the friendship is based on your expectation that you will date them, they still owe you 0 and it is a bit of a lie. Just have to be truthful and if they say no then, well you hopefully like them as a person enough to just stay friends, so you just have to respect how they feel and not just disregard how they feel to solely acknowledge your own feelings.

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