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   Dasia Tostonposted 15 months ago

   Working on making better hubs, not exactly sure what else I can do. Any feedback is great. My articles keep getting sent back stating needing improvement.
   
   https://hubpages.com/style/Must-Try-Matte-Brands

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      Jason mackenzieposted 15 months agoin reply to this

      Hi, unable to view your hub. Every time I click on the link it shows 'Page not Found'. Can you please check and revert? Thanks, regards...

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         Dasia Tostonposted 15 months agoin reply to this

         If you go on my profile you will see the article if the link is still not working.

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      Kierstin Gunsbergposted 15 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Dasia! I took a look at your profile where there was one article published to view. Being successful on HubPages and as a freelance writer can be a tricky formula. First off, your profile picture is great! It's a really nice, clear picture, so that's wonderful. For your bio or About Me section I'd love to see you talk a little more about your background. What are you good at, what's your expertise? Why are you an authority on what you're writing? Readers will want to know that and be more apt to read your articles if they feel they can trust you on the subjects you're writing about.
      
      As far as your content, the only thing you have published feels a bit too much like a marketing pitch. Writing about skincare and skincare routines is good content, but you'll want to do it in a way where the reader doesn't feel pushed to any particular product. I wouldn't include brand names or photos, but would focus more on the benefits of a skincare routine, particular ingredients to look for when choosing a cleanser, moisturizer, or toner, and why those ingredients are beneficial/what they do.
      
      It's important to read through your work once or twice before publishing it to check for grammatical or factual errors. You want to make sure that it's easier to read and understand and can be viewed on any device without trouble. One of the ways that you can make sure your articles are mobile, tablet, and computer friendly is by including three full-width photos within the text. I try not to use any side-profile photos or photos that are low quality or lack attribution. Always make sure to credit the source of the photos you use in your articles. You can find great photos for free on Unsplash.com or within the Flickr Creative Commons. All they require is an attribution for use.
      
      Lastly, make sure that your titles and summaries are search-friendly. Using your "Top Products to Use" article as an example I would retitle it something like, "How to Clear Up Acne with Products that Contain Salicylic Acid" or "Why Removing Your Makeup Before Going to Bed is So Important". Those are titles that give a description of what the article will be about and help guide the reader to the right article for obtaining information relevant to their question. It also gives you a guideline on questions you need to answer within the article.

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   Marisa Wrightposted 15 months ago

   Your English needs a lot of work and it looks as though you didn't read this over after you'd written it, because lots of parts don't make sense.  For instance, your very first paragraph:
   
   Matte lipstick brands is a great accessory to any look. - "brands" is plural, "is" is singular. Also, it's lipstick that's the accessory, not the brand. 
   
   It provides a smooth stainless, velvety appearance. Making your lip desirable to touch. Being one of the top trending make-up looks of the century.    The second and third sentences are actually clauses, they can't be sentences in their own right.  This should be, "It provides a smooth stainless, velvety appearance, making your lip desirable to touch, and is one of the top trending make-up looks of the century."
   
   Perhaps you're trying to avoid starting every sentence with "It", but you have to do that by writing proper sentences. 
   
   This particular lipstick gives a look that no other lipstick can give from start to finish. - which lipstick?? You don't mention one.
   
   There are multiple mistakes like this all the way through the Hub.

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      Dasia Tostonposted 15 months agoin reply to this

      Thanks I used proofreader to look over any mistakes that were missed. Assuming everything that was advised for correction was corrected. Definitely will be looking over it again.

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         Marisa Wrightposted 15 months agoin reply to this

         Is English your first language?  I notice you make the same mistake in your reply here, that you make constantly in your article:
         
           "Assuming everything that was advised for correction was corrected." 
         
         That is not a complete sentence, because the verb has no subject. What you mean is, "I assumed everything that was advised for correction was corrected."
         
         What is proofreader?  Is it software, or did you pay someone to proofread this?  If you paid someone, demand your money back, because they didn't do the job.

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            Dasia Tostonposted 15 months agoin reply to this

            The article talks about Matte Lipstick. Therefore, when reading the article anywhere 'this lipstick' is applied one is to assume 'matte lipstick'.
            
            The language of my article may not be completely known to you, but their are ways to talk about a subject without always putting the name of what is being discussed. Yes I do talk informal as you see in my articles. So if suggesting I shouldn't be so informal it's best just to state that opinion.

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               Marisa Wrightposted 15 months agoin reply to this

               Your title is about matte brands, plural, and your first sentence talks about brands, plural.   So that's why "this lipstick" sounds as though you're changing the subject to talk about a specific lipstick.
               
               Informal language is fine, but I'm seeing a lot of sentences that don't even make sense.   I was going to give you some examples, but honestly I'd need to rewrite every second sentence.   
               
               HubPages is a place to write magazine-quality articles.  Think of the standard of writing you see in your favourite women's magazines - that's what you're aiming for.

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