I'd like feedback on my article: Why are women so insecure?

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   Shashank Mittalposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Why are women so insecure? (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   psycheskinnerposted 7 years ago

   My feedback is 1) women are not all insecure, and 2) you don't seem to have relevant expertise or cite sources.  As a woman, and a psychologist, I would not be inclined to want to read this article or believe what it is asserting.

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      Shashank Mittalposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Psycheskinner,
      I agree with your point that not all women are insecure, there are always exceptions. I have written the article on a general note, taking into account my real life experiences. I have also included a link for a source. Can you now read and tell me, where am I wrong?
      
      Thank You

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         theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Complete generalisation and fallacy. I can't believe anyone would be writing this sort of thing these days.
         
         "Women can't help but overthink about everything, especially when it comes to their man or other half. To stop overthinking she must:
         
         Divert her mind to something productive.
         cultivate a hobby in daily routine such as reading, writing, dancing, cooking etc.
         Yoga / Meditation is great way to relax your body and mind.
         Talk it out to the person i.e. her man or other half so that her false assumptions are cleared
         Hang out with her friends to feel better by herself."
         
         
         
         You are kidding right? This must be satire. Otherwise, I think you need to update your attitudes to reflect the 21st century.
         
         "So to fix things or keep the relation going smoothly, men will have to start paying attention to small things. Send her flowers and appreciate her cooking, tell her you are going to skip your game night to have dinner with her."
         
         
         
         Sorry to be so rude, but honestly, it's utter rubbish. My advice? Delete it.
         
         Edit: By the way, you do know that the majority of Hubpages' editors are women?

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            Shashank Mittalposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Hi raggededge,
            I am sorry I will the delete the article, as you said. I am fairly new to this website. Sorry If I had hurt your feelings or anyone else's.
            
            Also, can you kindly suggest something, maybe a topic or anything?

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               theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               I am sorry too, for being so harsh. It's just that we've come a long way from that 'go occupy yourself by taking up a hobby' scene. Women work. They work long hours, They have careers. They are often the main earner in the family. We manage finances, pay mortgages, bring up kids and maintain relationships. Or not. Lots of us are the decision-makers of the household. Those stereotypes are done with now. It might be different where you live, but you are writing for a progressive, global readership... and statistically, most of those readers will be female.
               
               To get ideas, just surf the internet. I look for titles that catch my attention and then write up the topic from my perspective. I pay attention to what's in the news and try to write an evergreen article about it. Or at least, I make lists of possible articles. Keep a notebook. Read, read and read more. Write lots. The more you do, the easier and faster ideas will come.

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                  greenmindposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                  +1

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         psycheskinnerposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         It is also not true at that almost all women are insecure with a few exceptions, and the source you cite doesn't say that either.  So, no.  That does not fix it.
         
         Write about topics where you have expertise.

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   Luke Holmposted 7 years ago

   LOL! Brace yourself...the women are coming. You are definitely going to get some flak for this article. Just glancing at the content, you make a lot of sweeping generalizations that are impossible to know (ie. You have no evidence to support your claims). Also, a lot of what you say about men are sweeping generalizations too, most of which I find to be untrue in my life or relationships with my friends. You make yourself out to be some Love Guru, but I doubt you've actually gone to the primary source and discussed these ideas with women.
   
   If you want some actual feedback, consider that women are different, as are men, in each country, so this title should be narrowed down to a specific region or demographic. Also, your subtitles have unpredictable capitalization throughout. This weird capitalization (and punctuation) error occurs throughout the content of your hub as well. Finally, your content is poorly worded. Consider the following excerpt from your article:
   
   "Now, there is a huge possibility that you will ignore her discussion because its just her assumptions and its a baseless topic to discuss (for you). Also, that is what men do. But, to her it is a question of her love, life, self esteem, self attention and the future of her kids. In most cases you can handle the situation, you will answer her questions and discussions and clear her misunderstandings and have a good night sex."
   
   What are you trying to say here? It's unclear.
   
   Overall, this is a very sexist article...for both men and women. However, maybe your radical beliefs will bring in traffic from like minded people? Who knows.

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      Shashank Mittalposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Luke,
      I knew this was coming, I was prepared. Sorry to hurt anybody's feelings.
      I have made huge transformation into the content and fixed some capitalization errors as-well.
      Would really appreciate if you look into it one last time and let me know the problem areas.
      Otherwise I think I am going to delete the article altogether.

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   Kierstin Gunsbergposted 7 years ago

   Hi Shashank! I don't think your article will pass the quality assessment because it's assuming something very broad without any credentials. If you had a degree or certification to back up a mostly academic article on the female psyche then it might pass, but HubPages is pretty strict that you must be considered an expert on the topic you're writing about.
   
   There are a lot of sweeping generalizations and claims without sources in your article like "Generally speaking, Men tend to ignore women after marriage. That is mostly due to the exaggeration power of women, who can make any topic into a life threatening final call," and "Women are overthinkers."
   
   I think that you would do best to toss this article and start fresh with some more searchable topics. What are things you search for, things you like to learn about and things you have personal experience with that can be enjoyed by a broad audience regardless of your opinion? Write about those things.
   
   Personally, as a mother, I have a lot of experience with potty training, diapering, breastfeeding and money-saving. I'm also a business and communications student and a writer. So I write a lot of articles about business, money, writing and parenting - I have authority in those areas.
   
   If you want more ideas I do have an article about how to make money on HubPages in my profile with a lot of tips for new writers.

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   theraggededgeposted 7 years ago

   He's deleted it. I think the problems began with the word 'Why' in the title, and got worse from there onward.

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      greenmindposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I think it's time someone wrote a "Why Are Men So Insecure?' hub.

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   Jorge Cruz99posted 7 years ago

   In the name of men: this proto-"article" is a shame, it does not belong here or anywhere else.
   Women go through physical and societal hardships that we cannot, even nearly, imagine.
   They are as intelligent, brave, and decided as us.

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