I'd like feedback on my article: 8 Things You Should Give a Chance for...

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  1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
    Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: 8 Things You Should Give a Chance for Improving Quality of Your Life

    1. RTalloni profile image89
      RTalloniposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      This helpful guide can help you pass the QAP.

      1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
        Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thank you

    2. Ryan Cornelius profile image69
      Ryan Corneliusposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Pictures will help it along with fixing the errors. When I first started writing articles I had many and never knew until a specialist told me. So I know what you are experiencing here. Well written article. Its just the errors you must fix

      1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
        Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thank you smile

  2. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    It is written well but doesn't follow HP style guidelines. Here is the link https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thank you smile

  3. AliciaC profile image97
    AliciaCposted 5 weeks ago

    Your article is certainly a lot better than the first one that some people create for HubPages. It does contain some English errors, though. Perhaps you could check the article again yourself or maybe you know someone who could go through the article and point out the errors to you.

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the appreciation. I'll proofread for any grammatical mistakes. ☺️

  4. yusrat19 profile image62
    yusrat19posted 5 weeks ago

    i think you need to add some pictures. Plus there are some english errors.

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Can you point out a few. I have re-read the article but I am unable to find them. My article again failed the QAP.

      1. theraggededge profile image99
        theraggededgeposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

        Hi there,

        Your title is grammatically 'awkward'. Try '8 Small Steps to Improve the Quality of Your Life'.

        Your first paragraph could be improved:

        "Ever think of getting better at handling your life. Sometimes at the end of the day, we hope we had better relationships, a little better health and little more of everything. This article is not a know-it-all, but you can try these small steps to see if you ever have a chance."

        "Do you ever think your life could be improved? Often at the end of the day, we wish we'd got along with other people better. Perhaps looked after ourselves and generally made more of an effort. Try these 8 small steps to make life more fulfilling."

        My suggestion is to read your article out loud and see if you can spot any clunky sentences. Reading aloud uses a different part of the brain and can highlight issues you wouldn't notice otherwise. Better still ask someone else to read it.

        Put your subheadings into title case and lose those exclamation points after Exercise.

        Try those things first and see how it goes smile

        1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
          Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

          Thank you smile

        2. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
          Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

          Hi, I have incorporated the changes you mentioned and since then I have also proof read the article twice. Still my article has failed the QAP. Can you please help me?

  5. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
    Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks ago

    I will proof read the article. Thanks for the suggestion. smile

  6. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    Nice, Bev!

  7. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    Hi Gargi,

    You need to supply the link to the article. The other link is no longer valid.

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      The link is now active.

      http://hub.me/amVC3

  8. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    I took a quick look to see what could be done to improve your article. One thing I noticed is there are no sources or references. You wrote: "Researchers say we are the average of the five people we live with. So, better be with people who are positive and lively." Who are the researchers? You need to cite your source. It gives you and your article credibility.

    For example, Dr. Grove, who authored the bestseller Relentless, and taught Michael Jordan to jump even higher, states in his book about being successful, "The people you spend time with..."

    The guidelines explain this aspect a bit further https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the suggestion. smile

  9. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
    Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks ago

    I am thankful for your suggestions for the improvement of my article. Yet my article didn't pass the QAP. I'm unable to understand the reason. Please help me with more suggestions on improving my article.

  10. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    You have to post the current link smile

    1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
      Gargi Srivastavaposted 5 weeks agoin reply to this

      Posted.

  11. Kenna McHugh profile image89
    Kenna McHughposted 5 weeks ago

    Review the guidelines, again. Though, you added one source that is not enough, and the guidelines explain this. Also, you don't have a bio, the guidelines explain how to do this as well. All the advice you are offering needs to have a source unless you are an expert in these areas, which reflects in your bio and gives credence to the article.

    1. AliciaC profile image97
      AliciaCposted 5 weeks ago

      There are a few English errors left in the article. For example, the third sentence in the "Communicate" section should say "will" improve your relationships beyond imagination.

      As Kenna has said, I think adding more references would be useful, especially when you start to recommend fitness activities. I find the suggestion that people learn to do a headstand a bit worrying. The pose can be harmful if it's not done correctly. It's probably not a good idea to suggest that people new to exercise learn how to perform the activity.

      1. Gargi Srivastava profile image57
        Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 weeks ago

        Thank you everyone for your suggestions on the improvement of my article. My article has now passed the QAP and is now featured. Thank you for your love and support.

        1. theraggededge profile image99
          theraggededgeposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

          Congratulations smile

      2. Kenna McHugh profile image89
        Kenna McHughposted 4 weeks ago

        That's great news! Good job!

       
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