I'd like feedback on my article: Dinosaurs Waiting for R.Owen and C.Doyle

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   Mykolaposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Dinosaurs Waiting for  R.Owen and C.Doyle (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Mykola, how're you doing?
      
      I had to click on this because you have my partner's name in the title
      
      You should not include those keywords. They have no place in any article. It's spammy.
      
      Your introduction doesn't need a subtitle. The fact that it is the intro and tells the reader what the article is about is self-explanatory.
      
      Okay, straight away, I am confused. Is this about "The aim of the article is to show for students of humanitarian faculties possibilities of synthetic thinking in analysis and creation of literary works. ", as you tell us in the introduction? Or... is it about dinosaurs and paleontologists?
      
      I think the idea of teaching language through science is a good one, however, you are including information that is irrelevant.
      
      The photos need more explanation. One of them, the stegosaurus, is clearly marked with a copyright watermark. That alone will prevent your hub being featured. They must be referred to in the context of the topic, not as in the discovery of dinosaurs.
      
      So, if the hub is focussed on the roles of dinosaurs and paleontologists in literary works, then stick to that topic closely and get rid of everything else. Go through it and say to yourself, "Is this sentence connected to the topic or is it general information readily available elsewhere?" Be ruthless.
      
      

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         Mykolaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks, I understood your remarks. Yours. Mykola.

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            Mykolaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Sorry, I forgot to say Hi!
            I've just come back home. The weather is bad.
            Could you explain me how to differ a copyright watermark?

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               theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               It's on the image, Mykola. Clearly marked. Make sure your images are licensed for use on a commercial site. It's really important.

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                  Mykolaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                  My thanks. I'll try.You inspire me. Yours

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      greenmindposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Mykola. Since you're savvy enough to know that keywords matter, I think you should reconsider the title of your article. Could you make it more generally understandable, so people know what they're about to read?

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         Mykolaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Hi, Green!
         Thanks a lot for the tip about the title. Could you  explain me how and where do I write key words? Is it necessary to indcate them? What do they mean in Hub terms? Yours. Mykola

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            theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Keywords occur naturally in the text. You don't need to worry about them. You certainly should not include them in the way you have done.
            
            Your title must reflect exactly what the article is about, and it must not be too long. Suggestions:
            
            "Dinosaurs in Classic and Modern Literature"
            
            "Language Studies: Dinosaurs in Literature"
            
            "Dinosaurs and Lost Worlds in Literature"
            
            Once you have your title, you MUST write the article so that every sentence is relevant to it. Create subtitles that are also relevant. Keep your writing tight and on-topic.
            
            "Looking at scientific and literary texts in tandem, this article will focus on the roles and limitations of the imagination in the exploration of lost worlds--both fictitious and real."
            
            That is your road map. You don't need the quotes around individual words in that sentence, by the way.
            
            Cheery-pip

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               Mykolaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               Finally, it's clear. I'm at your service always. Really, glad. Yours, Mykola

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