Feedback on my article

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   Trihorusposted 7 years ago

   Hello, this is the article: https://hubpages.com/health/How-to-Wake … ed-to-Know
   
   I received a moderator comment that it needs improvement. Please let me know where all can I improve.
   Thank you!

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      theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      We can't see it, as it's not published. There should be a specific link in your email to enable you to post a request for feedback to the forum. It'll generate a new thread.

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         Trihorusposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         Yes, found the email. I have reposted with the allowed link. Thanks!

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   Trihorusposted 7 years ago

   I haven't received any email yet. I just checked my article and at the top, it has a moderator suggestion and also let me know that the article isn't published and that I have to address the moderator set alert first. I gave my best, and am not sure where I need more work.

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   Venkatachari Mposted 7 years ago

   The first thing I noted is there are grammar mistakes and broken sentences. You have used those hyphens, semicolons, etc. to stitch sentences which is not okay. I think it to be a wrong usage and not allowed for professional writers. You need to change those sentences and make them simple. They can be divided into two or more simple sentences to express your ideas more clearly.
   
   For example, in the first paragraph, you can make it "you set the alarm as you wanted to get up early" as one sentence and the next sentence will be "However that never happens".
   
   And, in the next sentence "... in no time do you realize...", remove that word "do" and close the sentence after "slept more than you had wanted". Put the rest of the sentence as a new one. You can change them your own way but, be simple in creating those sentences more meaningfully.
   
   And, your title is "How to wake up early". It means you already know the importance of waking up early.
   
   So, the paragraph titled "Why should you wake up early" does not mean any sense, as far as I think.
   
   The sub-title "How to prepare" is lacking meaning. So, put it as "How to prepare for waking early" or something like that.
   
   The poll capsule about lucid dreaming may not be related to the topic. You need to make it more meaningful for your topic and put it in a very short title. You can make it "How to wake up from dreams".

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      Trihorusposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much, that really helped. I have recently discovered hyphens, colons and all and I've been overusing them everywhere. Kind of unable to avoid them now. I'll definitely work on fixing all of that. Thanks again!

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   mrslagibbposted 7 years ago

   I too noticed grammar and punctuation mistakes.  I did leave a comment on the article, you must be working on it to improve it, because i could no longer find it.  I found the article on a whole very interesting for a sufferer of insomnia.  It is very difficult to proof read by yourself, I have found some very good websites to help with this for grammar and punctuation  https://www.nounplus.net/grammarcheck/

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      Trihorusposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much! I actually use the Grammarly while writing but those errors could slip past it.

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