I'd like feedback on my article: Miracles of Lemon

Jump to Last Post 1-2 of 2 discussions (4 posts)
  1. Shaheer Haider Sherry profile image59
    Shaheer Haider Sherryposted 2 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: Miracles of Lemon (must be signed in to view)

    1. theraggededge profile image98
      theraggededgeposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      There are two major issues with your article.

      The first one is the most important. You make many claims as to the efficacy of lemons without providing any factual sources to back up what you say. Are you a doctor who is qualified to offer medical advice? If not, then you need to provide references of scientific and medical studies.

      You claim that lemon is good for the teeth, but all the evidence points to the contrary as lemon juice is acidic. https://www.1800dentist.com/diet-and-nu … th-enamel/

      You must fact check everything.

      The second problem is that your English writing skills are not yet up to the high standard that HubPages requires. For example, what are 'lemon nut rations'?

      You have a lot of work to do, so good luck.

    2. quotations profile image94
      quotationsposted 2 months agoin reply to this

      The main things you need to improve are your grammar and writing style.

      Many of your sentences are jumbled and/or run on. You also include random thoughts in the same paragraph. In many sentences, the subject and verb do not agree. Here is an example of a paragraph which has almost everything wrong with it. However there are many others.



      Let me point out some of the things wrong with this paragraph and its component sentences:

      1. Lemon works naturally antiseptic medicine. -- This not really a sentence. You may be trying to say that lemon is a natural antiseptic.

      2. Lemon Juice useful for acne and eczema. -- your sentence lacks a verb. At the very least it should say "Lemon juice is useful ..." but even that is not correct. How is it useful. If it helps get rid of acne and eczema you should say so.

      3. Also removing wrinkles and blackheads.-- This is a sentence fragment. I suppose you are trying to say that lemon is also useful for removing wrinkles and blackheads. But your sentence lacks a verb.

      3. Lemon's have natural anti aging formula which works for skin's health. -- This is grammatically incorrect. You would not use the possessive form of lemons. That's just part of what is wrong with this sentence.

      4. Thousand of remedies of lemon for all kind of skins.-- I suppose you could say that lemon juice is an ingredient in thousands of remedies and works on all kinds of skin. Notice the problem with your plurals not agreeing and other grammatical issues.

      4. Massage or drink Lemon Juice is useful for skins tones and makes glowing skin. --again, the subject does not agree with the verb.

      These are only some of the problems in this single paragraph and nearly every sentence is incorrect. I can appreciate how discouraging it must be to hear this. However unless you can bring your English up to the level of a native North American English speaker you have no hope of getting your hubs to pass quality assessment.

      If you can afford it, you might try paying a native English speaker to edit one or more of you articles and show you the corrections in detail so that you can learn from your mistakes and improve. Otherwise I am afraid that you will not be able to publish here.

  2. AliciaC profile image98
    AliciaCposted 2 months ago

    In addition to what others have said, there are problems right at the beginning of the article that might stop people from reading further. The English errors in your bio are discouraging. If you edit your article, you should edit the bio, too. You also need to create a different sentence to start the article. Most of your first paragraph is found on many other sites.

 
working

This website uses cookies

As a user in the EEA, your approval is needed on a few things. To provide a better website experience, hubpages.com uses cookies (and other similar technologies) and may collect, process, and share personal data. Please choose which areas of our service you consent to our doing so.

For more information on managing or withdrawing consents and how we handle data, visit our Privacy Policy at: https://hubpages.com/privacy-policy#gdpr

Show Details
Necessary
HubPages Device IDThis is used to identify particular browsers or devices when the access the service, and is used for security reasons.
LoginThis is necessary to sign in to the HubPages Service.
Google RecaptchaThis is used to prevent bots and spam. (Privacy Policy)
AkismetThis is used to detect comment spam. (Privacy Policy)
HubPages Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide data on traffic to our website, all personally identifyable data is anonymized. (Privacy Policy)
HubPages Traffic PixelThis is used to collect data on traffic to articles and other pages on our site. Unless you are signed in to a HubPages account, all personally identifiable information is anonymized.
Amazon Web ServicesThis is a cloud services platform that we used to host our service. (Privacy Policy)
CloudflareThis is a cloud CDN service that we use to efficiently deliver files required for our service to operate such as javascript, cascading style sheets, images, and videos. (Privacy Policy)
Google Hosted LibrariesJavascript software libraries such as jQuery are loaded at endpoints on the googleapis.com or gstatic.com domains, for performance and efficiency reasons. (Privacy Policy)
Features
Google Custom SearchThis is feature allows you to search the site. (Privacy Policy)
Google MapsSome articles have Google Maps embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
Google ChartsThis is used to display charts and graphs on articles and the author center. (Privacy Policy)
Google AdSense Host APIThis service allows you to sign up for or associate a Google AdSense account with HubPages, so that you can earn money from ads on your articles. No data is shared unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
Google YouTubeSome articles have YouTube videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
VimeoSome articles have Vimeo videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy)
PaypalThis is used for a registered author who enrolls in the HubPages Earnings program and requests to be paid via PayPal. No data is shared with Paypal unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
Facebook LoginYou can use this to streamline signing up for, or signing in to your Hubpages account. No data is shared with Facebook unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy)
MavenThis supports the Maven widget and search functionality. (Privacy Policy)
Marketing
Google AdSenseThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Google DoubleClickGoogle provides ad serving technology and runs an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Index ExchangeThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
SovrnThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Facebook AdsThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Amazon Unified Ad MarketplaceThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
AppNexusThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
OpenxThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Rubicon ProjectThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
TripleLiftThis is an ad network. (Privacy Policy)
Say MediaWe partner with Say Media to deliver ad campaigns on our sites. (Privacy Policy)
Remarketing PixelsWe may use remarketing pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to advertise the HubPages Service to people that have visited our sites.
Conversion Tracking PixelsWe may use conversion tracking pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to identify when an advertisement has successfully resulted in the desired action, such as signing up for the HubPages Service or publishing an article on the HubPages Service.
Statistics
Author Google AnalyticsThis is used to provide traffic data and reports to the authors of articles on the HubPages Service. (Privacy Policy)
ComscoreComScore is a media measurement and analytics company providing marketing data and analytics to enterprises, media and advertising agencies, and publishers. Non-consent will result in ComScore only processing obfuscated personal data. (Privacy Policy)
Amazon Tracking PixelSome articles display amazon products as part of the Amazon Affiliate program, this pixel provides traffic statistics for those products (Privacy Policy)
ClickscoThis is a data management platform studying reader behavior (Privacy Policy)