I'd like feedback on my article: Halloween Safety 411

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   Ecolicious LMposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Halloween Safety 411

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   DrMark1961posted 5 years ago

   When you edited this it probably failed because of the Amazon capsules. HP have changed their guidelines in recent years and the capsules you have displayed are no longer ok. The first capsule could be changed to a link in the Safe Halloween Costume capsule. Add something like "Here are some (amazon link) night safety wrist bands that I bought for my kids to be more visible."
   The capsule on the book should probably just be deleted.

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      Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Do you mean the whole capsule or the wording of the capsule? Please explain and thank you for the feedback.

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         DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

         HP seems to discourage the capsules. You will have better success with an Amazon in-line link. After inserting the link, delete the capsule.

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            Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

            And place the link within the text?

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               DrMark1961posted 5 years agoin reply to this

               When you add the sentence with the product (light up bracelets), make it an active link to that page on Amazon. You can look at the "home jaundice treatments for dogs" article on my profile and see how it looks.
               Since I switched to the links and deleted the capsules, I make more sales.

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                  Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

                  Awesome. I will look at that. Thank you

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   Could you replace some of the instances of 'kid' with child and children?

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      Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Yes! Thank you for the feedback

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   AliciaCposted 5 years ago

   The previous posters have raised some good points. It would also be a good idea to proofread the article, especially the first two paragraphs in the “Safe Halloween Costume Caution” capsule.

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      Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Did I miss something again? Thank you I will check.

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   Kenna McHughposted 5 years ago

   I notice you don't have a bio. You need one to give credence to your article. What experience or knowledge do you have to write this article? Are you a cop? Security guard? Self-defense teacher? Martial arts teacher? Concerned citizen or parent? Head a Neighborhood Watch committee? Is your husband a cop? I think you get the idea.
   Also, I changed your first paragraph around (just a bit), so it flows better.
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   It can be challenging to believe that trick-or-treating on Halloween night can be dangerous, but unfortunately, it is a perfect time for bad people to do bad things. Before you walk out the door, on Halloween night, with your children, consider these safety tips to keep them safe while they trick-or-treat.

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      Ecolicious LMposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      The hardest part for me is writing my bio. I feel so uncomfortable writing about myself. I will give it a go though. Thank you for your feedback.

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